Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答中有语法错误和词汇使用不当，例如“crucified of seeing”应为“crazy about singing”。建议使用更自然的表达方式，并注意句子结构，使回答更简洁明了。

例: Yes, I really enjoy singing because it helps me relieve stress and makes me feel happy and relaxed.

提案: 回答中句子结构不完整，表达不清晰。建议使用完整句子，注意时态和连贯性，避免句子中断。

例: I learned how to sing for almost three years when I was in primary school. However, after I entered middle school, I didn't have time to continue singing lessons, so I stopped taking them.

提案: 回答中时态使用不当，如“I'd really loved”应为“I'd really love”。句子较长且缺少适当的连接词，建议简化句子并使用连接词使表达更流畅。

例: I would love to sing for my friends because it makes me feel relaxed. They usually appreciate my songs and say nice things, which makes me happy.

提案: 回答中存在拼写错误（seeing应为singing），句子不完整且表达不清晰。建议注意拼写，使用完整句子，并提供具体细节支持观点。

例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness to people. Whenever I sing, my friends show their genuine happiness, and I think singing can make both the singer and the listeners feel joyful.

× Yes, I'm a crucified of seeing every time when I was singing, I feel really relieved from the head pressure, so it made me feel really happy and comfortable.

✓ Yes, I'm a crucified of singing. Every time when I sing, I feel really relieved from the head pressure, so it makes me feel really happy and comfortable.

句中“crucified of seeing”中的“seeing”应为动名词“singing”，且“crucified”用法不当，可能想表达“crucified”应为“crucified”拼写错误或误用，建议改为“I am fond of singing”或“I love singing”。另外，时态应保持一致，描述习惯动作用一般现在时。

× Actually I learned how to sing when I was in the primary school for almost 3 years I think.

✓ Actually, I learned how to sing when I was in primary school for almost 3 years, I think.

“in the primary school”中“the”不必要，通常说“in primary school”。句中时态正确，但需要加逗号分隔句子，使句子更通顺。

× But after I graduate from the primary school and get into the middle school, I have no time to study singing, so I gave up singing lessons but I still.

✓ But after I graduated from primary school and got into middle school, I had no time to study singing, so I gave up singing lessons, but I still like singing.

时态不一致，描述过去事件应使用过去时态，如“graduated”，“got”，“had”。句尾不完整，补充完整句子。

× I'd really loved to sing for my friends because when I am singing for them I feel kind of relieved and they will appreciate my songs and they will say some good words to me to make me laugh and I think that is rewarded.

✓ I'd really love to sing for my friends because when I sing for them, I feel kind of relieved and they appreciate my songs and say some nice words to me to make me laugh, and I think that is rewarding.

“I'd really loved”时态错误，应为“I'd really love”或“I really love”。“good words”改为“nice words”更自然。句子结构需调整，使表达更流畅。

× Yes, I do think seeing can bring happiness to people. So every time I sing, my friends who are listening to my songs will show their truly happiness to me. And I think not only the people who listening to my songs will feel.

✓ Yes, I do think singing can bring happiness to people. So every time I sing, my friends who are listening to my songs show their true happiness to me. And I think not only the people who listen to my songs will feel happy.

“seeing”应为“singing”。“truly happiness”应为“true happiness”，形容词修饰名词。最后一句不完整，补充完整并调整时态。