Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答时应避免重复表达，句子结构应更自然流畅。可以简化表达，避免冗余，同时注意语法准确性。

例: Yes, I enjoy singing because it helps me relax and boost my energy whenever I feel tired or stressed.

提案: 回答应更简洁，避免语法错误和重复。可以用更自然的表达方式说明学习经历和练习频率。

例: Yes, I started learning to sing with a teacher at my school in 2023, and since then, I practice singing once or twice a week on my own.

提案: 回答应更清晰，避免口语填充词，句子结构应更规范。表达感情时可以更具体。

例: I would like to sing for my mom because she has always supported me and helped me grow into a better person.

提案: 回答中应注意语法准确性，避免多余词汇。可以用更具体的例子和连词使表达更连贯。

例: Yes, I believe singing brings happiness. For instance, when I feel anxious, singing helps me relax and lifts my spirits.

× I always sing songs to help me relax and feel the freedom so to improve my mood.

✓ I always sing songs to help me relax and feel free so as to improve my mood.

这里“feel the freedom”用法不当，应该用“feel free”表示“感到自由、轻松”。此外，“so to improve”不符合习惯表达，应改为“so as to improve”表示目的。

× Yes, I've learnt for a quite short time and since 2023 I've learned how to sing a song with one of the teachers inside my school and after that I never learned it from a teacher but I always practice singing every day or just two times a week.

✓ Yes, I've learnt for quite a short time and since 2023 I've learned how to sing a song with one of the teachers at my school, and after that I have never learned from a teacher but I always practice singing every day or just two times a week.

“for a quite short time”中“a”多余，应去掉；“inside my school”应改为“at my school”更自然；“after that I never learned”时态不对，因动作持续到现在，应使用现在完成时“have never learned”。

× Yes, I've learnt for a quite short time and since 2023 I've learned how to sing a song with one of the teachers inside my school and after that I never learned it from a teacher but I always practice singing every day or just two times a week.

✓ Yes, I've learnt for quite a short time and since 2023 I've learned how to sing a song with one of the teachers at my school, and after that I have never learned from a teacher but I always practice singing every day or just two times a week.

“inside my school”用法不当，英语中通常用“at my school”表示“在学校”。

× On to be I guess like personally I really want to sing for my mom because like she is quite a perfect mom who always helps me and matured me a lot.

✓ To be honest, I guess personally I really want to sing for my mom because she is quite a perfect mom who always helps me and has matured me a lot.

“On to be”应为“To be honest”；“matured me a lot”应使用现在完成时“has matured me a lot”；去掉多余的“like”。

× So actually for the person I want to see just like my Mama.

✓ So actually, the person I want to sing for is just my mom.

句子结构不完整，缺少谓语动词，应补充“is”；“see”用词不当，应为“sing for”；“Mama”改为更正式的“mom”。

× For example, when I always feel anxious or nervous, I usually to sing a song which can help me improve my mood and to expand my mind.

✓ For example, when I feel anxious or nervous, I usually sing a song which can help me improve my mood and expand my mind.

“usually to sing”中“to”多余，应去掉；“always”与“when”搭配不当，改为“when I feel”；“to expand”前的“and”连接两个动词时，第二个动词不需要“to”。