Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more natural and concise by avoiding redundancy and improving sentence structure. Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly and provide clearer reasons. For example, instead of repeating 'personal reason' and 'personal opinion', you can say 'because I feel I don't have a good singing voice.'

例: Honestly, I don't like singing because I feel I don't have a good singing voice. However, I really enjoy listening to a variety of music, which is why I prefer being a listener rather than a singer.

提案: Focus on answering directly and clearly. Avoid filler words like 'uh' and improve grammar. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide specific details. For example, mention your father's singing as a reason you appreciate singing, even if you don't practice it.

例: I have never learned how to sing because it is not my hobby. However, my father was a good singer, so I appreciate singing as a valuable skill for those who enjoy it.

提案: Improve fluency by reducing hesitation and filler words. Use clearer linking words to connect your ideas. Also, try to be more concise and natural in your expression. For example, explain your interest in cultural and historical songs with clear reasons.

例: If I had a good singing voice, I would like to sing social and cultural songs that convey important messages about our heritage. This way, young people can learn about history through music, which I find very meaningful.

提案: Work on sentence structure and clarity. Use linking words to connect your points logically. Avoid repetition and improve vocabulary to express ideas more naturally. For example, explain how singing expresses emotions and entertains others, leading to happiness.

例: Yes, I believe singing brings happiness because it allows people to express their emotions and connect with others. Additionally, singing can entertain and uplift listeners, which contributes to a joyful atmosphere.

× I just like to listen music and the reason behind it, what I feel I don't have like that much good voice to sing some music.

✓ I just like to listen to music and the reason behind it is that I feel I don't have a very good voice to sing any music.

The verb 'listen' requires the preposition 'to' when followed by an object. Also, the sentence structure was unclear and needed rephrasing for clarity and correctness.

× I just like to listen music and the reason behind it, what I feel I don't have like that much good voice to sing some music.

✓ I just like to listen to music and the reason behind it is that I feel I don't have a very good voice to sing any music.

The verb 'listen' must be followed by the preposition 'to' when referring to music. Omitting 'to' is incorrect.

× I just like to listen music and the reason behind it, what I feel I don't have like that much good voice to sing some music.

✓ I just like to listen to music and the reason behind it is that I feel I don't have a very good voice to sing any music.

The phrase 'that much good voice' is incorrect; 'voice' is singular and should be preceded by an article and quantifier like 'a very good voice'.

× I just like to listen music and the reason behind it, what I feel I don't have like that much good voice to sing some music.

✓ I just like to listen to music and the reason behind it is that I feel I don't have a very good voice to sing any music.

The sentence was fragmented and unclear; restructuring it improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× I would, I never try to learn how to sing in my life because it's not my hobby.

✓ I would say I have never tried to learn how to sing in my life because it's not my hobby.

The verb 'try' should be in the present perfect tense 'have tried' to indicate an action that has never happened up to now.

× So that's why I never give interest to uh, singing something.

✓ So that's why I never gave interest to singing.

The phrase 'give interest to' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'gave interest in' or better 'was interested in'. Also, 'singing something' is awkward; 'singing' alone suffices.

× But uh, my uh, father was a good singer, so that's why I feel it's a good thing for the person who love to sing a song.

✓ But my father was a good singer, so I feel it's a good thing for a person who loves to sing a song.

The verb 'love' should be in third person singular form 'loves' to agree with the singular subject 'person'.

× But uh, my uh, father was a good singer, so that's why I feel it's a good thing for the person who love to sing a song.

✓ But my father was a good singer, so I feel it's a good thing for a person who loves to sing a song.

The verb 'love' must be conjugated as 'loves' to agree with the singular subject 'person'.

× If I have that much good voice for singing, I always want to sing for the social songs, which will be, uh, cultural songs by which we can, uh, convey a message to our society about our culture.

✓ If I had a very good voice for singing, I would always want to sing social songs, which are cultural songs through which we can convey a message to our society about our culture.

'That much good voice' is incorrect; 'a very good voice' is correct. Also, 'social songs' should be plural without 'the'. The conditional sentence requires past tense 'had' and modal 'would' for hypothetical situations.

× If I have that much good voice for singing, I always want to sing for the social songs, which will be, uh, cultural songs by which we can, uh, convey a message to our society about our culture.

✓ If I had a very good voice for singing, I would always want to sing social songs, which are cultural songs through which we can convey a message to our society about our culture.

The sentence expresses a hypothetical condition, so the past tense 'had' and modal 'would' are appropriate instead of present tense.

× And the youth also learn many things about the history.

✓ And the youth also learn many things about history.

The definite article 'the' is unnecessary before 'history' when speaking generally.

× Singing also a good way to express their thoughts to others.

✓ Singing is also a good way to express one's thoughts to others.

The sentence is missing the verb 'is'. Also, 'their' is vague; 'one's' is more appropriate in general statements.

× And by singing we can also entertain other people, so we can also a reason of reason of the happiness.

✓ And by singing, we can also entertain other people, so we can also be a reason for their happiness.

The sentence was incomplete and repetitive. Adding 'be' and correcting the phrase to 'a reason for their happiness' improves clarity and grammar.