Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答中有重复和语法错误，表达不够自然。建议简洁明了地表达观点，并注意语法和时态的正确使用。

例: Yes, I like singing because it makes me feel happy. I enjoy singing with my friends as it creates a joyful atmosphere.

提案: 回答中语法错误较多，表达不清晰。建议用简单句表达自己的观点，避免重复和复杂结构。

例: No, I have never seriously learned to sing. For me, singing is just a fun activity, and I prefer to enjoy it without formal lessons.

提案: 回答较为清晰，但连接词使用不足，句子结构简单。建议使用连接词使表达更连贯。

例: Actually, I prefer to sing for myself. However, sometimes I sing with my friends at karaoke, which is very enjoyable.

提案: 回答中有发音错误和词汇使用错误，表达不准确。建议使用正确词汇并简洁表达观点。

例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness to people because it releases hormones that improve our mood.

× I like to sing with my friend and we were happy together.

✓ I like to sing with my friends and we were happy together.

friend 应该用复数形式 friends，因为这里指的是多个朋友。

× No I don't seriously learn to learn how to sing.

✓ No, I don't seriously want to learn how to sing.

这里缺少情态动词 want 来表达“想要”，原句中动词使用不当。

× learning will maybe makes me unhappy and think for me is happy things.

✓ learning may make me unhappy and I think singing is a happy thing for me.

will maybe makes 结构错误，应为 may make；think for me is happy things 语序和表达不正确，需调整。

× I think so seeing can bring happiness to every persons because seeing can release some taupang or something.

✓ I think so singing can bring happiness to every person because singing can release some taupang or something.

persons 应为 person，singing 拼写错误。

× Hormone that makes me happy.

✓ Hormones that make me happy.

Hormone 应为复数 hormones，且句子缺主语，需调整。