Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally good but contains some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing, such as "singing my favorite songs lose my mood." Try to use correct verb forms and clearer expressions. Also, avoid redundancy and keep sentences concise. Use linking words to improve coherence.

例: Yes, I really enjoy singing because it helps me relax and express my emotions. For instance, when I'm feeling stressed, singing my favorite songs lifts my mood and makes me feel happier. Moreover, I find it a fun way to connect with others during social gatherings.

提案: Your answer is clear and well-structured. To improve, try to add linking words to connect ideas smoothly and include a bit more specific detail about what you learned or how it helped you.

例: Yes, I learned how to sing when I was in school. I took part in a choir where a music teacher taught us basic singing techniques and breathing exercises. This experience was enjoyable and helped me improve my vocal control and boost my confidence.

提案: Your answer has good content but contains grammatical errors such as "Singing for them feel special" and "share music with loved ones creates." Make sure subject-verb agreement is correct. Also, use linking words to connect ideas and avoid redundancy.

例: I would like to sing for my family and close friends because they are supportive and appreciate my efforts, which motivates me to perform better. Furthermore, sharing music with loved ones creates a warm and joyful atmosphere that strengthens our bond.

提案: Your answer is relevant and mostly clear. However, the phrase "feel updated and joyful" is awkward; consider using "feel uplifted and joyful." Also, try to use more varied vocabulary and linking words to enhance coherence.

例: Yes, I believe singing can definitely bring happiness to people. It allows individuals to express their emotions and serves as a great way to relieve stress. For example, many people feel uplifted and joyful when they sing their favorite songs, whether alone or with others.

× For example, when I'm feeling stressed, singing my favorite songs lose my mood and makes me feel happier.

✓ For example, when I'm feeling stressed, singing my favorite songs lifts my mood and makes me feel happier.

The verb 'lose' is incorrect here because the subject 'singing my favorite songs' is singular, so the verb should be 'loses' if used. However, the intended meaning is that singing improves mood, so 'lifts' is the correct verb. Also, 'makes' agrees with the singular subject 'singing'. The correction uses 'lifts' to correctly express the positive effect on mood.

× Yes, I learned how to sing when I was in school.

✓ Yes, I learnt how to sing when I was in school.

Both 'learned' and 'learnt' are past tense forms of 'learn'. 'Learnt' is more common in British English, which fits the context better. This is a stylistic correction rather than a strict grammar error.

× Singing for them feel special because they're supportive and appreciate my efforts, which motivates me to perform better.

✓ Singing for them feels special because they're supportive and appreciate my efforts, which motivates me to perform better.

The subject 'Singing for them' is singular, so the verb should be 'feels' instead of 'feel' to agree in number.

× Additionally, share music with loved ones creates a warm and joyful atmosphere that strengthens our bond.

✓ Additionally, sharing music with loved ones creates a warm and joyful atmosphere that strengthens our bond.

The verb form 'share' is incorrect here; the gerund 'sharing' is needed to function as the subject of the sentence.

× For example, many people feel updated and joyful when they sing their favorite songs, either alone or with others.

✓ For example, many people feel uplifted and joyful when they sing their favorite songs, either alone or with others.

The adjective 'updated' is incorrect in this context; the correct adjective is 'uplifted' to express feeling happier or emotionally elevated.