Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不够自然，句子较长且重复，建议简化句子结构，避免重复表达，并注意动词形式的正确使用。

例: Yes, I like singing because it helps me relax and improves my mood for the next day. Singing is a great form of entertainment that makes me feel happy and refreshed.

提案: 回答中语法错误较多，表达不够清晰，建议使用更准确的时态和句型，避免模糊表达，并且补充具体细节使内容更丰富。

例: Yes, I learned how to sing when I was in primary school. We had singing classes where the teacher taught us various techniques and gave us practice exercises. Since then, I have improved my singing skills.

提案: 回答中多次出现重复词汇，表达不够准确，建议注意词汇拼写和用法，避免重复，句子结构应更清晰，内容更具体。

例: I want to sing for my sister because singing allows me to express my feelings and strengthen our bond. Moreover, it gives me a chance to communicate and connect with her on a deeper level.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和用词不当，句子较长且结构混乱，建议简化句子，使用正确的动词形式，并提供更具体的例子。

例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness to people. When I sing, the lyrics can lift their mood and remind them of happy memories. Sometimes, music even helps people overcome difficult times.

× Yes, I like singing because I think it's a good way to help me to relax and it can offers me a good mood and attitude towards the next day and after seeing I think I can really take entertainment, I can really feel relaxed.

✓ Yes, I like singing because I think it's a good way to help me relax and it can offer me a good mood and attitude towards the next day. After singing, I think I can really enjoy myself and feel relaxed.

动词后面不需要加to，help后面直接用动词原形relax；can后面应接动词原形offer，而不是第三人称单数形式offers；句子中seeing应为singing，且表达应更清晰，使用enjoy myself更合适。

× Yes, I think I've learned how to sing when I'm in primary school. At that time we had a singing class and a teacher told us how to sing. The skills and some practices also from them on I think I am good at.

✓ Yes, I think I learned how to sing when I was in primary school. At that time, we had a singing class and a teacher told us how to sing. The skills and some practices from them helped me, and I think I am good at it.

表达过去发生的事情时，时间状语用过去时态，应该用I was而不是I'm；I've learned用法不当，改为简单过去时learned更合适；最后一句不完整，补充谓语helped me，并加上it指代前文内容。

× I want to sing for my sister because I think seeing is a good way to share my attitude to others, and it can also build a connection with others. What's what's more, I think it's really a good chance for me to communicate with others.

✓ I want to sing for my sister because I think singing is a good way to share my attitude with others, and it can also build a connection with them. What's more, I think it's really a good chance for me to communicate with others.

seeing应为singing；share后面搭配介词with而非to；避免重复使用others，改为them更自然；去掉重复的what's。

× Yes, I think seeing can bring happiness to people because I think when I sing to others the words and lines in the song can really helps others to have a good mood and recall them back to their memories and sometimes it can also help them out of the trouble.

✓ Yes, I think singing can bring happiness to people because when I sing to others, the words and lines in the song can really help others to have a good mood and recall their memories. Sometimes, it can also help them out of trouble.

seeing应为singing；helps应为help，因为主语是复数words and lines，动词应与主语一致；recall后面不需要back，且搭配their memories更自然；out of the trouble中the不需要。