Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer shows enthusiasm but contains some unnatural expressions and grammatical errors. Try to use more natural phrases and correct verb forms. Also, avoid informal or unclear expressions like 'another freaking time'. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, I definitely love singing because it helps me relieve stress and recharge my energy after a long day. Moreover, singing stimulates my imagination and creativity, which has been very helpful in my studies and research.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains many grammatical mistakes. Focus on directly answering the question with a clear topic sentence and supporting details. Use simple and correct sentences to express when and why you learned to sing.

例: If I remember correctly, I started learning how to sing when I was 12 years old because I wanted to improve my skills and fit in with my group of friends.

提案: Your answer has good content but some sentences are confusing and grammatically incorrect. Try to organize your ideas clearly and use linking words. Also, avoid vague expressions like 'just my stars'.

例: To be honest, I am an introverted person and don't often think about others, but I enjoy singing for my parents because they are my biggest supporters and always listen to me when I share my thoughts and feelings.

提案: Your answer is relevant but contains repetition and incomplete sentences. Use clear and complete sentences with appropriate linking words. Provide specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

例: From my point of view, singing definitely brings happiness because it allows people to express their feelings and emotions. This expression can create positive feelings not only for the singer but also for the listeners.

× Moreover, singing also bring me the chance to increase my imagination and creativity which helped me a lot in my studies as well as research too.

✓ Moreover, singing also brings me the chance to increase my imagination and creativity which has helped me a lot in my studies as well as research too.

The verb 'bring' should be in the third person singular form 'brings' to agree with the singular subject 'singing'. Also, 'helped' should be 'has helped' to correctly express the present perfect tense indicating an action that started in the past and continues to the present.

× If my memory serves me correctly, I started to think when a worse when I turn to 12 because my mouth wants me to have some abilities to meet the needs of the society as well as one of my circle of friends.

✓ If my memory serves me correctly, I started to think when I was worse when I turned 12 because my mind wanted me to have some abilities to meet the needs of society as well as one of my circle of friends.

The verbs 'turn' and 'wants' should be in the past tense 'turned' and 'wanted' to match the past time frame. Also, 'mouth' is incorrect here; 'mind' is the appropriate word. 'The society' should be 'society' without 'the' as it refers to society in general.

× So I studied how to think things I would tell.

✓ So I studied how to think about things I would say.

The original sentence is unclear and awkward. 'Think about things I would say' is a clearer and grammatically correct expression. 'Think things I would tell' is incorrect structure.

× To be honest, I am an introverted person which I not usually think to other people but I do love and enjoy to sing for my parents because they just my stars and always support me and listen to my chat and sorrows which I feel really comfortable to sing for them.

✓ To be honest, I am an introverted person who does not usually think about other people but I do love and enjoy singing for my parents because they are my stars and always support me and listen to my talks and sorrows, which makes me feel really comfortable singing for them.

The relative pronoun 'which' should be 'who' when referring to a person. 'I not usually think to other people' is incorrect; it should be 'I do not usually think about other people'. 'Enjoy to sing' should be 'enjoy singing'. 'They just my stars' needs the verb 'are'. 'Listen to my chat' should be 'listen to my talks'. The sentence is also restructured for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× From my part of views, the answer is definitely yes, mainly because when you sing you can describe your feelings and emotions and show that's to other people which can which can brings the positive feelings for other people too.

✓ From my point of view, the answer is definitely yes, mainly because when you sing you can describe your feelings and emotions and show them to other people, which can bring positive feelings to other people too.

'Part of views' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'point of view'. 'Show that's' should be 'show them'. 'Which can which can brings' is repetitive and incorrect; it should be 'which can bring'. 'Brings' should be 'bring' to agree with plural subject 'which' referring to 'show them'. 'For other people' should be 'to other people'.