Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答表达了喜欢唱歌的原因，但语言稍显简单，且有语法错误，如“a sense of freedom and relaxed”应为“a sense of freedom and relaxation”。建议使用更自然的表达，并注意语法准确性。

例: Yes, I enjoy singing because it gives me a sense of freedom and relaxation. I especially like singing with my friends at karaoke, but I prefer not to perform on stage in front of others.

提案: 回答中表达不够清晰，句子结构混乱，且有语法错误，如“for a particular”不完整。建议简洁明了地回答问题，并使用完整的句子。

例: Yes, I took music classes in primary and high school like most students, but I never received any professional singing training.

提案: 回答中表达了个人感受，但句子较长且有些重复。建议直接回答问题，避免重复，并使用连接词使表达更流畅。

例: Honestly, I prefer to sing for myself because it helps me relax and feel happy. I don't enjoy performing on stage for others.

提案: 回答中有语法错误，如“a sense of satisfy”应为“a sense of satisfaction”，且表达稍显重复。建议使用更准确的词汇，并简洁表达观点。

例: Definitely. Singing brings happiness because it allows people to express their emotions and relieve stress.

× I like singing because when I sing I can feel a sense of freedom and relaxed.

✓ I like singing because when I sing I can feel a sense of freedom and relaxation.

这里“relaxed”是形容词，表示“放松的”，但句子中需要一个名词来与“a sense of”搭配，正确用法是“relaxation”，表示“放松的感觉”。

× I like singing with my friends in the karaoke but not staying on the stage to perform for others.

✓ I like singing with my friends at the karaoke but not staying on the stage to perform for others.

介词“in”用于表示“在……里面”，而“karaoke”作为场所，通常用“at”表示“在某个地点”。

× I just take music classes in the primary school and the high school like everyone else, but I didn't learn professional skills for a particular.

✓ I just took music classes in primary school and high school like everyone else, but I didn't learn professional skills for a particular purpose.

这里描述过去的经历，动词应使用过去式“took”。另外，“for a particular”不完整，需补充名词，如“purpose”。

× I just take music classes in the primary school and the high school like everyone else, but I didn't learn professional skills for a particular.

✓ I just took music classes in primary school and high school like everyone else, but I didn't learn professional skills for a particular purpose.

“in the primary school and the high school”中的冠词“the”不必要，通常说“in primary school and high school”。

× Well, that's really a good question, but to be honest, I just want to think for myself.

✓ Well, that's really a good question, but to be honest, I just want to think by myself.

“think for myself”表达不准确，正确表达应为“think by myself”，表示“自己思考”。

× I like singing because it can make me relax and feel happy, but I don't want to stay on the stage for others to make them happy.

✓ I like singing because it can make me relax and feel happy, but I don't want to stay on the stage to make others happy.

“stay on the stage for others to make them happy”结构不自然，正确表达是“stay on the stage to make others happy”，表示“为了让别人开心”。

× Definitely, as I said before, when you sing you can feel a sense of satisfy because when you sing you can say your emotions aloud and put stress out.

✓ Definitely, as I said before, when you sing you can feel a sense of satisfaction because when you sing you can express your emotions aloud and relieve stress.

“a sense of satisfy”中“satisfy”是动词，需用名词“satisfaction”。“say your emotions”表达不准确，应为“express your emotions”。“put stress out”不地道，正确表达是“relieve stress”。