Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中有些语句不够自然，且存在语法错误，如“forget about my voice”表达不清晰，且“leaves my mood”用词不当。建议使用更地道的表达，避免重复和语法错误。

例: I really enjoy singing because it helps me feel calm and relieves stress. When I sing my favorite songs, I feel happy and relaxed, which is a great way to forget my worries. Also, listening to music always lifts my mood and brings me joy.

提案: 回答结构清晰，表达较自然，但可以使用更多连接词使句子更流畅，如“because”后面可以用“so”连接结果。建议丰富词汇，避免重复“singing”。

例: Honestly, I have never learned how to sing because I was very busy with schoolwork when I was young, so I didn't have enough time to practice or take singing lessons. However, I might try learning in the future if I have more free time.

提案: 回答内容具体，但表达略显重复和不够自然，如“get their attention and encouragement”表达不够地道。建议使用更自然的表达方式，并注意句子连贯。

例: I want to sing for my teachers and classmates to gain their support and encouragement. Also, I would like to sing for my parents because their support might help me attend singing lessons. Singing for them motivates me to improve.

提案: 回答中存在拼写错误（seeing应为 singing），句子结构混乱，表达不够清晰。建议注意拼写，使用更准确和连贯的句子表达观点。

例: Yes, I think singing can bring happiness to people. For example, singing songs can make others feel happy and relaxed, helping them forget their worries and enjoy a peaceful moment.

× I really enjoy singing because it helps me feel calm and stress free.

✓ I really enjoy singing because it helps me feel calm and stress-free.

stress free 应该用复合形容词形式 stress-free，表示“无压力的”，需要用连字符连接。

× it's a great way to forget about my voice.

✓ it's a great way to forget about my worries.

forget about my voice 语义不通，应该是忘记烦恼（worries）而不是“我的声音”，这里原句表达不清，建议改为 forget about my worries。

× listening to music always brings me joy and leaves my mood.

✓ listening to music always brings me joy and lifts my mood.

leaves my mood 语法和表达错误，正确表达应为 lift my mood，意为“提升我的心情”。

× Honestly, I have never learned how to sing because when I was young I was very busy with my schoolwork and homework.

✓ Honestly, I have never learned how to sing because when I was young I was very busy with my schoolwork and homework.

此句时态正确，无需修改。

× Maybe in the future I would like to try learning it if I have more free time.

✓ Maybe in the future I would like to try learning it if I have more free time.

此句中 would like 和 if 条件句使用正确，无需修改。

× I want to sing for my teachers and students because I have to get their attention and encouragement.

✓ I want to sing for my teachers and students because I want to get their attention and encouragement.

have to 表示“必须”，语义不符，想表达“想要得到”，应使用 want to。

× Also, I would like to sing for my parents so that they might support me by sending me to the singing lessons.

✓ Also, I would like to sing for my parents so that they might support me by sending me to singing lessons.

singing lessons 前不需要定冠词 the，除非特指某些课程。

× Singing for them motivates me.

✓ Singing for them motivates me.

此句无语法错误，无需修改。

× Yes, I think seeing can bring happiness to people.

✓ Yes, I think singing can bring happiness to people.

seeing 是“看见”，应为 singing “唱歌”，原句为拼写错误。

× For example singing songs can make others feel happy or feel relaxed so they will forget their the real world and relax themselves in a new world.

✓ For example, singing songs can make others feel happy or relaxed so they will forget the real world and relax themselves in a new world.

forget their the real world 中 their 和 the 连用错误，应去掉 their；feel happy or feel relaxed 中 feel 重复，简化为 feel happy or relaxed。