Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答时语言较为自然，但句子结构不完整，最后一句话未表达完整，且缺少连接词使内容显得断裂。建议回答时注意句子完整性，使用连接词使表达更连贯。

例: Yes, I like singing because it helps me reduce stress in my daily life. I especially enjoy classical music, as its melodies and meaningful lyrics always soothe me.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误，如“a good hobbies”应为“a good hobby”，且句子较长，缺少适当的停顿和连接词。建议注意语法准确性，分句表达更清晰。

例: I haven't learned how to sing yet, but I plan to take singing courses after I retire. I believe singing is a good hobby that benefits both mental and physical health.

提案: 回答内容具体且表达了感情，但句子稍显冗长，且“raising me up”表达不够地道。建议使用更自然的表达和适当的连接词。

例: If I had the chance to sing, I would love to perform for my parents to show my appreciation for their hard work and dedication in raising me. This would mean a lot to me.

提案: 回答较完整且内容丰富，但句子较长，缺少适当的停顿和连接词。建议分句表达，使用连接词使句子更流畅。

例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness to those around us. Especially classical music, with its beautiful melodies and meaningful lyrics, can encourage and inspire people during difficult times.

× I like the classic music and also sing these songs because I think their melody and lyrics are.

✓ I like classical music and also sing these songs because I think their melody and lyrics are beautiful.

“classic”是名词或形容词，表示“经典的”，但在这里应使用形容词“classical”来形容音乐类型。此外，句子末尾缺少形容词来描述“melody and lyrics”，应补充“beautiful”使句子完整。

× I haven't but I plan to take singing courses when I am retired in the future because I think it is a good hobbies and also benefit both mental and physical health.

✓ I haven't, but I plan to take singing courses when I am retired in the future because I think it is a good hobby and also benefits both mental and physical health.

“hobbies”是复数形式，但前面用的是单数不定冠词“a”，应改为单数“hobby”。此外，主语是“it”，谓语动词应加-s，改为“benefits”。

× I haven't but I plan to take singing courses when I am retired in the future because I think it is a good hobbies and also benefit both mental and physical health.

✓ I haven't, but I plan to take singing courses when I am retired in the future because I think it is a good hobby and also benefits both mental and physical health.

“hobbies”是复数形式，但前面用的是单数不定冠词“a”，应改为单数“hobby”。

× If I had chance to sing, I would love to sing for my parents as a way to express my appreciation and thanks to them for their hard work and dedication in raising me up.

✓ If I had the chance to sing, I would love to sing for my parents as a way to express my appreciation and thanks to them for their hard work and dedication in raising me.

“had chance”缺少冠词，应为“had the chance”。“raising me up”中“up”多余，通常说“raise someone”即可。

× If I had chance to sing, I would love to sing for my parents as a way to express my appreciation and thanks to them for their hard work and dedication in raising me up.

✓ If I had the chance to sing, I would love to sing for my parents as a way to express my appreciation and thanks to them for their hard work and dedication in raising me.

“raising me up”中的“up”是不必要的介词，通常说“raise someone”即可，去掉“up”更符合英语习惯。

× Yes, I think singing can bring happiness to people around you, especially for the classic music with beautiful melodies and meaningful lyrics which can encourage and inspire people when they are facing difficulties in their lives.

✓ Yes, I think singing can bring happiness to people around you, especially classical music with beautiful melodies and meaningful lyrics which can encourage and inspire people when they are facing difficulties in their lives.

“the classic music”应改为“classical music”，因为这里指的是音乐类型，不需要定冠词“the”，且“classical”是正确的形容词形式。