Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more concise and grammatically correct. Avoid redundancy and use correct verb forms. For example, say 'I love singing because I enjoy listening to music in my free time, and I often sing when I am alone as I feel shy.'

例: Yes, I love singing because I enjoy listening to music in my free time. I often sing when I am alone since I feel shy singing in front of others.

提案: Focus on clear sentence structure and avoid repetition. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. For example, say 'No, I have not learned how to sing, but I would love to learn because I consider singing a hobby I want to pursue in the future.'

例: No, I have not learned how to sing, but I would love to learn because I consider singing a hobby I want to pursue in the future.

提案: Make your answer more direct and use linking words to improve coherence. For example, say 'I want to sing for my girlfriend because it is on my bucket list. Hopefully, I will practice and learn music soon to make this happen.'

例: I want to sing for my girlfriend because it is on my bucket list. Hopefully, I will practice and learn music soon to make this happen.

提案: Try to complete your sentences and use specific reasons with linking words. For example, say 'Yes, I think singing brings happiness because it relieves stress and helps people relax, allowing them to forget their worries.'

例: Yes, I think singing brings happiness because it relieves stress and helps people relax, allowing them to forget their worries.

× Yes, I really love singing because I'm a person who love to listen musics music when I am free and I always usually listen to music and I always try to sing music when nobody is around me because I feel quite shy and.

✓ Yes, I really love singing because I'm a person who loves to listen to music when I am free and I usually listen to music and I always try to sing when nobody is around me because I feel quite shy.

The word 'love' should be 'loves' to agree with the singular subject 'a person' (subject-verb agreement). 'Musics' is incorrect as 'music' is an uncountable noun and should not be pluralized. Also, 'listen musics music' is redundant; it should be 'listen to music'. The phrase 'always usually' is redundant; 'usually' alone is sufficient. 'Sing music' is incorrect; it should be 'sing'. The sentence was also corrected for clarity and grammar.

× No, I have not learned how to sing, but I always do love to learn singing because I for me personally, I consider singing as a hobby that I would love to tackle up in the future.

✓ No, I have not learned how to sing, but I always love to learn singing because, for me personally, I consider singing a hobby that I would love to take up in the future.

The phrase 'do love' is unnecessary; 'always love' is sufficient. 'Tackle up' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'take up' when referring to starting a hobby or activity. The sentence was also restructured slightly for clarity and correctness.

× I think I do want to sing for my girlfriend because singing for my girlfriend is always one of my bucket list and hopefully I think that I would be able to practice or learn music in the near future so that I can make this happen.

✓ I think I do want to sing for my girlfriend because singing for my girlfriend is always one of my bucket list items and hopefully I think that I would be able to practice or learn music in the near future so that I can make this happen.

The phrase 'one of my bucket list' is incorrect because 'bucket list' is singular and needs a plural noun after 'one of my'. The correct phrase is 'one of my bucket list items'. This correction ensures proper singular/plural agreement.

× Yes, I do think that singing can bring happiness to the people because singing is a hobby or an act which relieves of stress and make people feel relaxed so that they can get rid of their pressure and strains which they are having from the hobbies or.

✓ Yes, I do think that singing can bring happiness to people because singing is a hobby or an act which relieves stress and makes people feel relaxed so that they can get rid of their pressure and strains which they have from their hobbies.

The phrase 'relieves of stress' is incorrect; it should be 'relieves stress' without 'of'. The verb 'make' should be 'makes' to agree with the singular subject 'singing' (subject-verb agreement). 'The people' is better as 'people' in general. The sentence ending was incomplete and was corrected for clarity and completeness.