Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答时语言不够自然，有语法错误和表达不清晰的问题，例如“recently I have seen about 5 hours with my friend in karaoke”表达不准确。建议简化句子结构，避免冗余，使用更准确的词汇表达时间和活动。

例: Yes, I enjoy singing because it helps me relax and express my emotions after a hard day. Recently, I spent about five hours singing karaoke with my friend, which was a lot of fun.

提案: 回答中语法错误较多，句子不连贯，表达不清晰。建议使用完整句子，注意时态和主谓一致，避免口语化错误，同时增加连接词使表达更流畅。

例: Actually, I have never received any professional singing training. The only time I learned was in primary school when the teacher taught the whole class. I remember I couldn't sing very well back then.

提案: 回答内容混乱，语法和词汇错误严重，表达不完整。建议先明确回答问题，使用简单清晰的句子，避免重复和错误，增加逻辑连接词。

例: I want to sing for my roommate because she always encourages me. Singing with her gives me confidence and I enjoy her positive feedback.

提案: 回答中有多处语法错误和表达不完整，内容不连贯。建议使用完整句子，注意时态和主谓一致，避免无意义的插入，内容要具体且连贯。

例: Definitely, singing can bring happiness because it helps people release emotions and express their feelings. For example, last week my friend sang many songs at karaoke to feel better after a breakup.

× Oh by the way, recently I have seen about 5 hours with my friend in karaoke.

✓ Oh by the way, recently I have spent about 5 hours with my friend in karaoke.

这里'seen'用法错误，应该用'spent'表示花费时间。'hours'是复数，使用正确。建议用'spent'替代'seen'。

× Actually have to say I didn't receive any professional training.

✓ Actually, I have to say I didn't receive any professional training.

句子缺少主语'I'，导致句子结构不完整。需要加上主语。

× If my memory serves me well.

✓ If my memory serves me well.

该句无语法错误，符合语法规则。

× The only course I take is at my primary school.

✓ The only course I took was at my primary school.

时态应与上下文一致，描述过去经历，故用过去时'took'和'was'。

× You know at that time just a teacher teach a whole classes how to sing and I vividly remember that I Can't Sing well at that time.

✓ You know at that time just a teacher taught a whole class how to sing and I vividly remember that I couldn't sing well at that time.

动词'teach'应使用过去式'taught'，'classes'应为单数'class'，'Can't'应为过去时'couldn't'。

× My roommate wise because sing with her sing for her you will get a lot of praise praise.

✓ My roommate is wise because singing with her, singing for her, you will get a lot of praise.

缺少动词'is'，'sing'应改为动名词'singing'，重复单词'praise'需删除。

× She is person that is good at have some good command on you and she can encourage me well and after her encouragement I am now more confident in seeing and.

✓ She is a person who is good at having some good command over you and she can encourage me well. After her encouragement, I am now more confident in singing.

缺少冠词'a'，'that'应改为'who'，'have'应改为动名词'having'，'command on you'应为'command over you'，句子结构不完整，需分句。

× Definitely because seeing is also a good way to help you to release some emotion, express our feelings.

✓ Definitely because singing is also a good way to help you release some emotions and express your feelings.

'seeing'应为'singing'，'emotion'应为复数'emotions'，'our'应改为'your'以保持一致。

× Oh it remind me of the ones things happened last week.

✓ Oh, it reminds me of the things that happened last week.

动词'remind'应为第三人称单数形式'reminds'，'ones things'应为'the things'，缺少关系代词'that'。

× My friend just lost her boyfriend.

✓ My friend just lost her boyfriend.

该句无语法错误，符合语法规则。

× Sing a lot of songs in karaoke and he will be.

✓ She sang a lot of songs in karaoke and she felt better.

句子结构不完整，缺少主语和谓语，'he will be'不完整，需补充完整表达。