Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Tu respuesta no es clara y contiene errores que dificultan la comprensión. Intenta expresar tus ideas de manera más natural y coherente, evitando palabras incorrectas como "distrustful" y "distressful". Además, organiza mejor tus ejemplos y usa conectores para que la respuesta sea más fluida.

例: Yes, I like singing because it helps me relax and feel happy. I often sing in the shower, while cooking, or when I'm driving around the city.

提案: Tu respuesta tiene errores gramaticales y de estructura. Procura usar tiempos verbales correctos y frases completas. Además, explica un poco más tus razones para enriquecer la respuesta y usa conectores para mejorar la coherencia.

例: Yes, I took singing classes for my 14th birthday because my mother gave them to me as a gift. However, I found singing more complicated than I expected, so I stopped attending after a few lessons.

提案: Tu respuesta es un poco confusa y repetitiva. Trata de ser más directo y claro en tu respuesta, usando vocabulario adecuado y evitando redundancias. Usa conectores para que la respuesta sea más lógica y natural.

例: I don't have a specific person I want to sing for. I sing because it makes me feel relaxed, and I enjoy it especially when others appreciate my singing.

提案: Tu respuesta es buena pero incompleta y un poco vaga. Intenta completar tus ideas y usar vocabulario más preciso. Además, usa conectores para que la respuesta sea más coherente y natural.

例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness because melodies often evoke positive emotions. Of course, it depends on the song, but music generally has the power to uplift people's moods.

× I like to sing because it's like a distrustful, distressful thing to do.

✓ I like to sing because it's like a delightful, distress-relieving thing to do.

The words 'distrustful' and 'distressful' are incorrect in this context. 'Distrustful' means suspicious, and 'distressful' is not commonly used. The intended meaning seems to be positive or relieving feelings, so 'delightful' and 'distress-relieving' are more appropriate adjectives.

× And I like to sing in the shower, singing while making and when I I'm driving the car in the city when I do exercise.

✓ And I like to sing in the shower, singing while cooking, when I'm driving the car in the city, and when I exercise.

The phrase 'singing while making' is incomplete and unclear; it likely meant 'singing while making food' or 'cooking'. Also, 'when I I'm driving' has a redundancy and should be 'when I'm driving'. The sentence structure is improved by separating activities with commas and conjunctions.

× Yeah, and in fact when I was 14, my mother give me to my 14th birthday singing class and I went to a few.

✓ Yeah, and in fact when I was 14, my mother gave me a singing class for my 14th birthday and I went to a few lessons.

The verb 'give' should be in past tense 'gave' to match the past time frame. Also, 'give me to my 14th birthday singing class' is awkward; it is clearer to say 'gave me a singing class for my 14th birthday'. 'I went to a few' is incomplete; specifying 'lessons' clarifies the meaning.

× Then I realized there is more complicated that I expected, so I quit it.

✓ Then I realized it was more complicated than I expected, so I quit it.

The phrase 'there is more complicated' is incorrect; the subject 'it' should be used with 'was' to agree in tense. Also, 'more complicated that' should be 'more complicated than' for correct comparison.

× And there's no particular person that I would like to sing for.

✓ And there's no particular person I would like to sing for.

The relative pronoun 'that' is unnecessary here and can be omitted for smoother, more natural English.

× I would like to sing only because the way that I feel, the relax that I feel when I do it, and the reason that I will do that is because people enjoy how I'm singing.

✓ I would like to sing only because of the way I feel, the relaxation I feel when I do it, and the reason I do it is because people enjoy how I sing.

The phrase 'the relax that I feel' is incorrect; 'relax' is a verb, the noun form 'relaxation' is needed. Also, 'the reason that I will do that' is better as 'the reason I do it' for clarity and tense consistency. 'How I'm singing' is better as 'how I sing' for general statement.

× I think that can bring happiness to people because there's something about the melodies that make people happy or make the people have certain emotions.

✓ I think that singing can bring happiness to people because there's something about the melodies that makes people happy or makes them feel certain emotions.

The subject 'melodies' is plural, so the verb should be 'make' but since 'something' is singular, the verb 'makes' is correct. Also, 'make the people have certain emotions' is awkward; 'makes them feel certain emotions' is more natural.