Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答中存在语法错误和用词不当，例如“like sing pretty much”应为“like singing a lot”，并且表达不够自然。建议使用更地道的表达方式，避免重复和冗余，同时注意句子结构的完整性。

例: Yes, I really enjoy singing because it makes me feel relaxed and happy. Many people have told me that I have a good singing voice, which makes me feel proud.

提案: 回答中表达不够自然，且有语法错误，如“went with any teacher”应改为“taken lessons from a teacher”。建议使用更准确的表达，并且增加连接词使句子更连贯。

例: No, I have never taken singing lessons from a teacher or used any books. I usually learn by listening to music and practicing on my own.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和句子结构混乱，如“because I when I was a child, I stay in their house”应改为“because when I was a child, I stayed at their house”。建议简化句子结构，使用正确的时态和连接词。

例: I would like to sing for my grandparents because when I was a child, I lived with them and I am very grateful for their care.

提案: 回答中有重复词汇“makes makes”，且表达不够清晰自然。建议使用更准确的词汇和句式，避免重复，并且使表达更流畅。

例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness because the melody of a song helps people relax and reflect on their day.

× Yes, I would like sing pretty much.

✓ Yes, I would like singing pretty much.

动词like后面接动名词形式singing，而不是动词原形sing。

× Singing can make me feel like ritual and comfortable and many people said that I have very good singing skill and that made me very proud of myself.

✓ Singing can make me feel relaxed and comfortable, and many people said that I have very good singing skills, which makes me very proud of myself.

形容词ritual用错，应为relaxed表示放松；singing skill应为复数singing skills；句子连接不当，使用which引导定语从句更合适。

× No, I never went with any teacher or any book.

✓ No, I have never gone to any teacher or used any book.

never与过去完成时连用更合适，且动词搭配错误，应该用go to teacher和use book。

× I just think by myself and listen to the music and practice by myself.

✓ I just think by myself, listen to music, and practice by myself.

the music前不需要定冠词，且句子中逗号分隔并列动作更清晰。

× I really want to sing for my grandparents because I when I was a child, I stay in their house and live with them and I'm really thankful.

✓ I really want to sing for my grandparents because when I was a child, I stayed in their house and lived with them, and I'm really thankful.

描述过去的动作应使用过去时态，stay和live应改为stayed和lived。

× Yes, I think singing can bring happiness to people because singing a song and the song melody makes makes people relax and can think what they do today.

✓ Yes, I think singing can bring happiness to people because singing a song and its melody make people relax and think about what they did today.

makes重复，应为make；relax后应接动词原形think；think后应加about；描述过去的动作用过去时did。