Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答表达了观点，但有语法错误和重复，且最后一句不完整。建议注意句子结构，避免重复，并确保表达完整。

例: I don't enjoy singing in front of others because I feel my voice isn't very good. However, I like singing alone as it helps me relax and boosts my confidence.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和表达不清晰，且使用了过多的填充词。建议简洁明了地表达观点，避免重复和语法错误。

例: No, I have never taken singing lessons because I usually prefer singing alone and haven't felt the need to learn formally.

提案: 回答中有重复和语法错误，表达不够清晰。建议使用正确的句子结构，避免重复，并清楚表达想法。

例: I would like to sing for my friends and family because they are supportive and I feel comfortable singing freely for them.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和词汇使用不当，且表达重复。建议使用准确的词汇，避免重复，并使句子更流畅。

例: Yes, singing can bring happiness because it allows people to express their emotions, which creates a joyful atmosphere for everyone around.

× I don't like singing in front of my friends because I think my voice is not very good.

✓ I don't like singing in front of my friends because I think my voice is not very good.

该句中动名词用法正确，无需修改。

× But I like singing by myself when I'm alone because it makes me feel relaxed and confident.

✓ But I like singing by myself when I'm alone because it makes me feel relaxed and confident.

该句中动名词用法正确，无需修改。

× Seeing by myself makes me feel feel.

✓ Singing by myself makes me feel relaxed.

原句中'Seeing by myself makes me feel feel'结构混乱，且单词重复。应为'Singing by myself makes me feel relaxed'，表达清晰且语法正确。

× Umm, I didn't learn how to sing because umm, in my experience, I don't like singing in my whole time, but I like to sing when I'm alone.

✓ Umm, I haven't learned how to sing because, in my experience, I haven't liked singing all my life, but I like to sing when I'm alone.

此句中时态使用不当。'didn't learn'改为现在完成时'haven't learned'更符合表达经历的语境；'don't like'改为现在完成时'haven't liked'以表达从过去到现在的持续状态。

× Definitely my friends or family because they would they would not left me my singing and I can sing sing to them freely as I want.

✓ Definitely my friends or family because they would not leave me alone when I sing, and I can sing to them freely as I want.

原句中'left me my singing'用词错误，应为'leave me alone'表示'不打扰我'；'sing sing'重复，应去掉一个。

× Yes, and it can. It brings the happily happiness to people and when people sing, they express their emotions and happiness to people and others.

✓ Yes, it can. It brings happiness to people, and when people sing, they express their emotions and happiness to others.

'happily happiness'中'adverb + noun'搭配错误，应为'happiness'；'to people and others'重复，简化为'to others'更自然。

× People can feel the happiness and the atmosphere can feel more happy.

✓ People can feel the happiness, and the atmosphere can feel happier.

'more happy'应使用比较级'happier'，形容词比较级形式错误。