Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答中有语法错误和重复表达，且用词不准确（如"steam"应为"singing"）。建议注意单词拼写和句子结构，避免重复，并用更自然的表达方式。

例: Yes, I like singing because it makes me feel happy and helps me relieve stress. I find it very enjoyable.

提案: 回答中有重复和语法错误，且表达不够清晰。建议简洁明了地回答问题，避免重复，并正确使用词汇，如"violin"而非"violent"。

例: No, I have never taken singing lessons because I believe my singing is good enough. Instead, I focus more on playing instruments like the violin and guitar.

提案: 回答中有重复且句子不够连贯。建议使用连接词使表达更流畅，并具体说明唱歌的场合和感受。

例: I want to sing for my friends during karaoke sessions because it helps us bond and I can get feedback on my singing. Plus, they really enjoy it.

提案: 回答中有拼写错误（"seeing"应为"singing"），句子不完整且表达不清。建议注意拼写，完整表达观点，并用连接词使句子连贯。

例: Yes, I think singing can bring happiness to people because it allows us to express our emotions and helps reduce stress.

× Yes, I like steam because I think sing can make me feel happy and make me feel less stressed.

✓ Yes, I like singing because I think singing can make me feel happy and make me feel less stressed.

动词后接动名词形式表示喜欢的动作，原句中'sing'应改为'singing'。

× Also I think I think it's good.

✓ Also, I think it's good.

句中重复'I think'，应删除多余部分。

× No, I've never learned how to how to sing because I always think I think my singing is good and I've got more on play instruments such as violent and guitar.

✓ No, I've never learned how to sing because I always think my singing is good and I've focused more on playing instruments such as violin and guitar.

句中重复'how to'和'I think'，应删除重复部分；'got more on play'表达不正确，应改为'focused more on playing'；'violent'拼写错误，应为'violin'。

× I've got more on play instruments such as violent and guitar.

✓ I've focused more on playing instruments such as violin and guitar.

'play'应改为动名词'playing'，表示专注于演奏乐器。

× I want to sing for my friends. We have karaoke, we have karaoke. Nice to play with each other and it can bond and have feedback to myself.

✓ I want to sing for my friends. We have karaoke sessions. It's nice to play with each other because it can bond us and give me feedback.

句子结构混乱，重复'we have karaoke'，应简化；'Nice to play with each other'缺主语，应改为完整句；'have feedback to myself'表达不当，应改为'give me feedback'。

× Also they enjoy it.

✓ Also, they enjoy it.

句首缺逗号，添加逗号使句子更通顺。

× Yes, I think seeing can bring happiness to people.

✓ Yes, I think singing can bring happiness to people.

'seeing'拼写错误，应为'singing'。

× Seeing can express emotions and I think it can make me make us less stress and.

✓ Singing can express emotions and I think it can make us less stressed.

'Seeing'应为'singing'；'make me make us less stress'表达重复且错误，应改为'make us less stressed'；句尾多余'and'应删除。