Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答较为自然，但句子较长且有些口语化缩写，建议使用更正式的表达，并且避免重复表达“喜欢唱歌”的原因。可以简洁明了地表达喜欢唱歌的原因，并适当使用连接词。

例: Yes, I enjoy singing because I have loved music since childhood. Moreover, joining the school singing club helped me develop this interest, and singing always makes me feel happy.

提案: 回答内容具体，但句子结构较复杂且重复使用“properly”，建议简化句子结构，使用更准确的词汇，并注意主语一致。

例: Yes, I learned to sing in the school singing club. The teacher taught me how to pronounce words clearly and use my throat and tongue correctly to avoid strain.

提案: 回答表达了个人性格和习惯，但用词较口语化且重复“usually”，建议使用更正式的表达，避免重复，并且可以稍微丰富内容。

例: I usually prefer not to sing for others because I am an introvert. Instead, I enjoy singing alone, such as when I am in the shower.

提案: 回答表达了观点，但句子结构不够清晰，且“every emotions”应为“every emotion”，建议注意语法和句子连贯性，使用连接词使表达更流畅。

例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness to people. Furthermore, singing conveys various emotions, allowing listeners to feel a wide range of feelings.

× Yes, I like singing 'cause I love listening to music since I was a kid and I joined the singing club at the school back then, so I kind of like to sing with the music as well.

✓ Yes, I like singing 'cause I have loved listening to music since I was a kid and I joined the singing club at the school back then, so I kind of like to sing with the music as well.

句中使用了“since I was a kid”，表示从过去某时开始持续到现在的动作，应该用现在完成时态“have loved”而不是一般现在时“love”。

× By joining the singing club, the teacher there helped me to learn about how to properly pronounce everything and how to properly use your own throat and use your tongue to sing so you won't hurt yourself by singing too hard.

✓ By joining the singing club, the teacher there helped me to learn about how to properly pronounce everything and how to properly use my own throat and use my tongue to sing so I wouldn't hurt myself by singing too hard.

句中主语是第一人称“我”，但使用了第二人称代词“your”和“yourself”，应改为第一人称代词“my”和“myself”，保持人称一致。

× By joining the singing club, the teacher there helped me to learn about how to properly pronounce everything and how to properly use your own throat and use your tongue to sing so you won't hurt yourself by singing too hard.

✓ By joining the singing club, the teacher there helped me to learn about how to properly pronounce everything and how to properly use my own throat and use my tongue to sing so I wouldn't hurt myself by singing too hard.

句中表达过去的假设或建议，使用“won't”不合适，应使用过去式的情态动词“wouldn't”表示与过去事实相符的否定可能性。

× Usually I would say nobody 'cause I'm an introvert myself, so usually I just sing in the shower instead of trying to sing for anybody.

✓ Usually I would say nobody 'cause I'm an introvert myself, so usually I just sing in the shower instead of trying to sing for anybody else.

句中“sing for anybody”表达不完整，通常应使用“anybody else”表示“为别人唱歌”，使表达更准确。

× Yes I do think singing can bring happiness to people but other than that I think you can bring every emotions to people when you're singing cause singing has emotions.

✓ Yes, I do think singing can bring happiness to people, but other than that, I think you can bring every emotion to people when you're singing because singing has emotions.

句中“every emotions”应为单数“every emotion”，且“cause”应为正式写法“because”，另外逗号的使用使句子更清晰。