Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is natural and relevant, but it can be improved by correcting grammar and making it more concise. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and avoid redundancy. For example, instead of saying 'I think that it make myself more rejuvenate,' you can say 'because it rejuvenates me.'

例: Yes, I love singing. I often sing Punjabi songs while doing household chores or cooking because it makes these tasks more enjoyable and rejuvenates me.

提案: Your answer is clear but can be improved by using better sentence structure and vocabulary. Avoid filler words like 'umm' and use linking words to connect ideas. Also, be more specific about your singing practice.

例: No, I have never taken formal singing lessons. However, I sing daily and sometimes listen to music to relax and rejuvenate myself.

提案: Your answer addresses the question but can be improved by organising ideas clearly and using linking words. Avoid redundancy and improve grammar. For example, instead of 'he is one of my supporter here in Canada,' say 'he is one of my biggest supporters here in Canada.'

例: I would love to sing for my husband because he is one of my biggest supporters here in Canada. Additionally, I enjoy singing at family gatherings since I feel comfortable and happy performing in front of them.

提案: Your answer is too short and incomplete. Try to provide a clear topic sentence followed by supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and finish your thoughts.

例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness to people because it is a joyful activity. Moreover, listening to music can uplift moods and create a positive atmosphere.

× Actually, I love singing. I sing a lot whenever I'm doing household chores or cooking. I listen or sing Punjabi songs to make the task more enjoyable and fun and also I think that it make myself more rejuvenate.

✓ Actually, I love singing. I sing a lot whenever I'm doing household chores or cooking. I listen to or sing Punjabi songs to make the task more enjoyable and fun and also I think that it makes me more rejuvenated.

The phrase 'I listen or sing Punjabi songs' is missing the preposition 'to' after 'listen', which is necessary when referring to music. Also, 'it make myself more rejuvenate' is incorrect; the verb should be 'makes' to agree with the singular subject 'it' (third person singular issue), and 'myself' should be replaced with 'me' as the object pronoun. Additionally, 'rejuvenate' should be in the past participle form 'rejuvenated' to describe the state resulting from the action.

× Actually I have never taken any personal classes for learning about singing. I just sing on my daily basis or sometime I listen music umm to rejuvenate myself.

✓ Actually, I have never taken any personal classes for learning about singing. I just sing on my daily basis or sometimes I listen to music to rejuvenate myself.

The word 'sometime' should be 'sometimes' to indicate frequency (incorrect use of quantifiers). Also, 'listen music' is incorrect; the verb 'listen' requires the preposition 'to' before the object. These corrections improve the sentence's grammatical accuracy.

× Actually, I would love to sing for my husband because he is one of my supporter here in Canada and singing for family gathering, et cetera. And I would love to sing for my family as well because I think that I can feel more comfortable and enjoy in front of them.

✓ Actually, I would love to sing for my husband because he is one of my supporters here in Canada and for family gatherings, et cetera. And I would love to sing for my family as well because I think that I can feel more comfortable and enjoy myself in front of them.

The word 'supporter' should be plural 'supporters' to agree with 'one of my' (singular and plural issue). Also, 'singing for family gathering' should be 'for family gatherings' to correctly express the plural noun with the preposition. Finally, 'enjoy in front of them' is incomplete; it should be 'enjoy myself in front of them' to correctly use the reflexive pronoun.

× Yes, I think singing can bring happiness among people and because it's a it's a good activity to sing or listen music and.

✓ Yes, I think singing can bring happiness to people because it's a good activity to sing or listen to music.

The original sentence is fragmented and contains redundancy ('and because it's a it's a'). The phrase 'bring happiness among people' should be 'bring happiness to people' (incorrect use of prepositions). Also, 'listen music' requires the preposition 'to'. The corrected sentence is clear and grammatically correct.