Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more natural and concise. Avoid redundancy and grammatical errors. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. For example, start with a clear topic sentence, then add supporting details with linking words like 'because' or 'so'.

例: Yes, I like singing, although I'm not very good at it. I often sing while listening to music during my travels or when doing chores. So, you could say I'm a 'bathroom singer' because I enjoy it casually, even though my voice isn't great.

提案: Improve sentence structure and clarity. Use correct grammar and avoid repetition. Link your ideas logically using words like 'because' or 'if'. Keep your answer within 5 sentences and be specific about your feelings or plans.

例: No, I have never had the opportunity to learn singing formally. However, I think it would be a relaxing and enjoyable activity to do with a partner. If I get the chance in the future, I would definitely like to take singing classes.

提案: Focus on clear sentence structure and grammar. Start with a direct answer, then add specific reasons using linking words like 'because' or 'so'. Avoid incomplete sentences and unclear phrases. Keep your answer concise and relevant.

例: I would love to sing in front of my family and friends because I have never done that before. If I had to choose one person, it would be my mother, as she has always encouraged me to try new things. Singing for her would be a great way to show my appreciation.

提案: Make your answer more coherent and grammatically correct. Use linking words like 'for example' and 'because' to explain your points clearly. Avoid incomplete sentences and be specific about how singing helps happiness.

例: Definitely, singing can bring happiness to people. Along with listening to songs, singing allows us to express our emotions and relax. For example, whenever I feel sad or depressed, I try to sing or listen to music, which helps improve my mood.

× I often listen music all the time while traveling, while doing some tasks.

✓ I often listen to music all the time while traveling, while doing some tasks.

The verb 'listen' requires the preposition 'to' when followed by an object. Hence, 'listen music' is incorrect; it should be 'listen to music'. This is a common preposition usage error.

× So while doing that I also sing song.

✓ So while doing that I also sing songs.

The word 'song' should be plural 'songs' because it refers to multiple instances of singing. Also, 'sing song' is not idiomatic; 'sing songs' is correct.

× Sometime you can say that I'm a bathroom singer but I don't have a great voice.

✓ Sometimes you can say that I'm a bathroom singer but I don't have a great voice.

The adverb 'Sometime' should be 'Sometimes' to indicate frequency. 'Sometime' means 'at some point in time' while 'Sometimes' means 'occasionally' which fits the context.

× Actually no, I never get opportunity to learn no singing or to tender singing classes.

✓ Actually no, I never got the opportunity to learn singing or to attend singing classes.

The sentence requires past tense 'got' instead of 'get' because it refers to a past event. Also, 'no singing' is incorrect; it should be 'singing'. 'Tender singing classes' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'attend singing classes'.

× I think that it would be a great partner activity to learn singing as a very relaxed whenever I listen and sing some songs.

✓ I think that it would be a great partner activity to learn singing as it is very relaxing whenever I listen to and sing some songs.

The phrase 'as a very relaxed' is incorrect; it should be 'as it is very relaxing'. Also, 'listen' requires the preposition 'to' before its object.

× And in future if you have ever got opportunity to do so, I would definitely enjoy the classes.

✓ And in the future, if I ever get the opportunity to do so, I would definitely enjoy the classes.

The phrase 'have ever got' is incorrect; 'ever get' is appropriate for future possibility. Also, 'in future' should be 'in the future'. The subject should be 'I' instead of 'you' to match the speaker.

× Want to sing for I would love to sing in the front of my family members or my friends.

✓ I would love to sing in front of my family members or my friends.

The sentence structure is incorrect. 'Want to sing for' is misplaced and unnecessary. The correct sentence starts with the subject 'I' followed by the verb 'would love to sing'.

× I never get a opportunity to do this before in the front of them.

✓ I have never had an opportunity to do this before in front of them.

The article 'a' should be followed by a word starting with a consonant sound; 'opportunity' is correct but the verb tense is wrong. 'Never get' should be 'have never had' to indicate past experience. Also, 'in the front of them' should be 'in front of them'.

× But in future if I wouldn't ever have to sing for someone, it would definitely be my mother.

✓ But in the future, if I ever have to sing for someone, it would definitely be my mother.

The phrase 'if I wouldn't ever have to' is incorrect for future conditional. The correct form is 'if I ever have to'. Also, 'in future' should be 'in the future'.

× She has done a lot of songs things for me she always encouraged me to try new things so I think that by singing for her I would be a great way to show my.

✓ She has done a lot of things for me and she always encouraged me to try new things, so I think that singing for her would be a great way to show my appreciation.

The sentence is a run-on and lacks conjunctions. 'Songs things' is incorrect; it should be 'things'. The phrase 'I would be a great way' is incorrect; it should be 'would be a great way'. The sentence ends abruptly; 'show my' needs an object like 'appreciation'.

× Definitely 100%.

✓ Definitely 100%.

This is an informal expression and acceptable in spoken English; no correction needed.

× I think that along with listening songs, singing songs are supposed to be passionate and arrangement ourselves.

✓ I think that along with listening to songs, singing songs is supposed to be passionate and a way to arrange ourselves.

The verb 'listening' requires the preposition 'to'. 'Singing songs are' should be 'singing songs is' because 'singing' is singular here. The phrase 'arrangement ourselves' is incorrect; it should be 'a way to arrange ourselves' or 'a way to organize ourselves'.

× By singing we will be able to take our mind from some depression activity.

✓ By singing we will be able to take our mind away from depressive feelings.

The phrase 'some depression activity' is incorrect. 'Depression' is a noun and 'activity' does not fit here. 'Depressive feelings' or 'depression' alone is better. Also, 'take our mind from' should be 'take our mind away from'.

× For example, whenever I feel very depressed from something or become very sad, I often try to listen or sing some.

✓ For example, whenever I feel very depressed or become very sad, I often try to listen to or sing some songs.

The phrase 'depressed from something' is incorrect; 'depressed' does not take 'from' in this context. Also, 'listen' requires 'to'. The sentence ends abruptly with 'sing some'; it should be 'sing some songs'.