Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Ваш ответ немного повторяется и содержит грамматические ошибки. Постарайтесь использовать более связные предложения и избегать излишних повторов. Например, используйте связки для логического перехода между идеями.

例: Yes, I like singing because it helps me relax and improves my mood. Although I don't have a very good singing voice, I still enjoy singing, especially when I'm at home.

提案: Ответ содержит много пауз и повторов, что снижает его естественность. Рекомендуется строить более плавные и чёткие предложения, избегая лишних слов и звуков.

例: No, I have never taken singing lessons because I don't have a good singing voice. I only sing quietly at home as a hobby when I'm alone.

提案: Ответ слишком повторяет одну и ту же информацию и звучит неестественно. Попробуйте сформулировать мысль более разнообразно и использовать связки для улучшения связности.

例: I would like to sing only for my children and family because I don't have a good singing voice, so I prefer to sing just for them.

提案: Ответ не совсем ясен и содержит много пауз и повторов. Рекомендуется использовать более чёткие и логичные предложения с конкретными причинами и примерами.

例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness because it helps people feel better and relax. For example, many people sing to lift their mood or celebrate special moments.

× Also I don't have a very good singing voice but I anyway singing.

✓ Also I don't have a very good singing voice but I sing anyway.

The verb 'singing' is incorrectly used here without an auxiliary verb. The correct form is the base verb 'sing' after 'I' in this context to indicate habitual action.

× I said that it helps me to feel better especially I sing at home.

✓ I say that it helps me to feel better especially when I sing at home.

The past tense 'said' is inconsistent with the present tense context. 'Say' should be used to express a current opinion. Also, 'especially I sing at home' is missing 'when' to connect the clause properly.

× No, I never, umm, I have never tried it because I have not got umm, a good singing voice.

✓ No, I have never tried it because I have not got a good singing voice.

The phrase 'I never' is incomplete and redundant with 'I have never tried it'. Removing 'I never' makes the sentence grammatically correct.

× It's my hobby only to sing quietly at home when I'm alone, not to try to learn it.

✓ It's my hobby only to sing quietly at home when I'm alone, not to try learning it.

The verb 'try' is usually followed by the gerund form when indicating an attempt to do something. 'Try to learn' is acceptable but 'try learning' fits better here to express the meaning of attempting the activity.

× I want to sing for my children only and for my family only because I said that I have not got good singing voice and I want to only sing for my children.

✓ I want to sing only for my children and my family because I say that I have not got a good singing voice and I want to sing only for my children.

The placement of 'only' is incorrect; it should be placed before the object it modifies. Also, 'I said' should be 'I say' to maintain present tense consistency. 'Good singing voice' needs the article 'a'.

× Yes, I think so because when you think you feel better, umm, I feel better when I think and uh, it brings happiness to people and also to me.

✓ Yes, I think so because when you sing you feel better, umm, I feel better when I sing and uh, it brings happiness to people and also to me.

The original sentence uses 'think' where 'sing' is intended, given the context about singing. Correcting the verb clarifies the meaning.