Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer deer "joyness" gesen ug hereglehgui, "joy" gesen ug ashigla. Davtaltgui, todorhoi ug helj, 5 sentence-d bagtaah heregtei. Dursamj, medremj, uchriig todorhoi helj ogno uu.

例: Yes, I really enjoy singing because it makes me feel happy and relaxed. When I sing, I can express my emotions and forget about my worries. Singing also helps me improve my mood and boost my confidence. Therefore, I consider myself quite good at singing and I always enjoy it.

提案: Ug helleg, ug helj duusgah argagui baina. Todorhoi, buren sentence bichih heregtei. Mongol duu, ostindo talaar todorhoi tailbar ogch, turshlaga, hugjil talaar helj ogno uu.

例: Yes, I have learned how to sing, especially Mongolian traditional songs called "ostindo." These songs are very challenging because of their unique melodies and vocal techniques. The last time I practiced singing was a few months ago, and I found it both difficult and rewarding.

提案: Ug helleg, ug helj duusgah argagui baina. Todorhoi, buren sentence bichih heregtei. "Write" gesen ugnii heden hugatsaa buren heregleh, "wrote" gesen ug heregleh heregtei. Mom-d duu duulah uchriig todorhoi helj ogno uu.

例: I have never sung live in front of people, but I would like to sing for my mom. I once wrote a song about her and tried to sing it, but it was quite difficult. Singing for my mom would be a special way to show my love and appreciation.

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例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness to people because music often lifts our spirits. When someone sings beautifully, it can inspire joy and comfort. For example, I feel happier when I listen to songs or sing myself. Even animals seem to respond positively to music, which shows its universal effect.

× I am a very huge fan of singing and when I when I am singing, when I sing it brings my joyness and happiness at the same time and I think I'm really good at singing though.

✓ I am a huge fan of singing and when I sing, it brings me joy and happiness at the same time, and I think I'm really good at singing though.

The phrase 'joyness' is incorrect; the correct noun is 'joy'. Also, 'a very huge fan' is redundant; 'huge fan' suffices. The sentence was also simplified for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× I am a very huge fan of singing and when I when I am singing, when I sing it brings my joyness and happiness at the same time and I think I'm really good at singing though.

✓ I am a huge fan of singing and when I sing, it brings me joy and happiness at the same time, and I think I'm really good at singing though.

The adverb 'very' is unnecessary before 'huge' because 'huge' already expresses a strong degree. Also, 'joyness' is not a correct word; 'joy' is the proper noun.

× If you know the Mongolian traditional songs which called ostindo, it's a very hard challenge for everyone. The last time I learned to sing it was a.

✓ If you know the Mongolian traditional songs called ostindo, they are a very hard challenge for everyone. The last time I learned to sing was a while ago.

The phrase 'which called ostindo' should be 'called ostindo' to correctly modify the noun. Also, 'it's a very hard challenge' should agree in number with 'songs' (plural), so 'they are a very hard challenge' is correct. The sentence 'The last time I learned to sing it was a.' is incomplete and was corrected to 'The last time I learned to sing was a while ago.' for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Who do you want to sing for?

✓ Who do you want to sing to?

The verb 'sing' is typically followed by the preposition 'to' when indicating the person receiving the singing, not 'for'.

× I cannot sing like on live like face to face.

✓ I cannot sing live, face to face.

The phrase 'like on live like face to face' is awkward and ungrammatical. It was corrected to 'sing live, face to face' to express the intended meaning clearly and correctly.

× I once write a song about my mom and I try to sing for her but it was so hard.

✓ I once wrote a song about my mom and I tried to sing for her, but it was so hard.

The verbs 'write' and 'try' should be in the past tense 'wrote' and 'tried' to match the past time frame indicated by 'once'. Also, a comma was added before 'but' for correct punctuation.

× If you had such a great voice, such a great vocal, such a great words, chores, Yeah, why not?

✓ If you have such a great voice, such great vocals, such great words, and chorus, yeah, why not?

The modal verb 'had' was changed to 'have' to match the present conditional context. 'Vocal' should be plural 'vocals' to match 'words'. 'Chores' is incorrect; likely intended 'chorus'. Also, 'such a great words' is incorrect because 'words' is plural and should not have 'a' before it.

× It brings a happiness.

✓ It brings happiness.

The noun 'happiness' is uncountable and does not require the indefinite article 'a'.

× For example, for me every even even to the people, even to the animals.

✓ For example, for me, and even for people and animals.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. It was restructured to form a coherent sentence expressing the intended meaning.