Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn không trả lời đúng câu hỏi về việc bạn có thích hát hay không. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi, tránh lạc đề và sử dụng câu ngắn gọn, rõ ràng hơn. Ngoài ra, hãy tránh nhầm lẫn giữa các hoạt động (ví dụ như bơi lội và hát).

例: Yes, I like singing because it helps me relax and express my emotions. Singing also allows me to connect with others and enjoy music.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu sự rõ ràng và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp, sử dụng cấu trúc câu đúng và tránh lặp từ. Hãy cung cấp thêm chi tiết cụ thể về cách bạn học hát.

例: Yes, I have learned how to sing by watching online tutorials on TV and practicing regularly. This method helps me improve my skills and relax at the same time.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn không rõ ràng và khó hiểu. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi, sử dụng câu đơn giản, tránh lỗi ngữ pháp và cung cấp lý do cụ thể hơn về người bạn muốn hát cho.

例: I want to sing for my family and friends because singing together can create happy moments and help us reduce stress.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn có ý tưởng tốt nhưng cần cải thiện ngữ pháp và cấu trúc câu để rõ ràng hơn. Hãy sử dụng liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc và thêm ví dụ cụ thể.

例: Yes, I believe singing brings happiness because it helps people relax and spend quality time together. For example, singing with friends after work can reduce stress and improve mood.

× I like swimming because it helped me relax and reduce stress.

✓ I like swimming because it helps me relax and reduce stress.

The sentence mixes present tense 'like' with past tense 'helped'. Since the liking is current, the verb 'help' should also be in present tense to maintain consistency.

× I like many thinkers in the world.

✓ I like many songs in the world.

The word 'thinkers' is incorrect in this context. The student likely meant 'songs' or 'types of music'. Using 'thinkers' is a semantic error but also affects grammatical correctness as it does not fit the context.

× Yes, I learn how to sing in on my TV, watching TV.

✓ Yes, I learned how to sing by watching TV.

The verb 'learn' should be in past tense 'learned' to indicate a completed action. Also, the phrase 'in on my TV' is incorrect and redundant; 'by watching TV' is the correct prepositional phrase.

× It helps me relax and how to learn how to learn to sing.

✓ It helps me relax and learn how to sing.

The original sentence is repetitive and ungrammatical. The phrase 'how to learn how to learn to sing' is redundant. Simplifying to 'learn how to sing' corrects the structure.

× I want to sing for my life, maybe my parents also my friends and have have they soon realized and reduce stress can create time for happy together.

✓ I want to sing for my life, maybe for my parents and my friends. Singing helps us realize things, reduce stress, and create happy times together.

The original sentence is confusing and ungrammatical. It lacks proper conjunctions and clear structure. Breaking it into clearer sentences and correcting verb forms improves clarity and grammar.

× Yes, I think singing can bring happiness to people because it helps them very relax and make a lot of time together with singing or reduce stress after work.

✓ Yes, I think singing can bring happiness to people because it helps them relax very much and spend a lot of time together singing or reduce stress after work.

The phrase 'helps them very relax' is incorrect; 'very' should modify an adjective or adverb, so 'relax very much' is correct. Also, 'make a lot of time together with singing' is awkward; 'spend a lot of time together singing' is better.