Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中存在多余信息，且有语法错误（如"seeing"应为"singing"），表达不够自然。建议直接回答是否喜欢唱歌，并简洁说明原因，避免无关内容。

例: No, I don't like singing because I am an introvert and prefer quiet activities. Singing makes me feel uncomfortable in public.

提案: 回答中多次使用填充词，且单词错误（"saying"应为"singing"），表达不够流畅。建议简洁明了地回答问题，并用连词连接句子，避免重复。

例: Yes, I learned to sing when I was in elementary school. I enjoyed expressing my feelings through songs, and I hope to improve my singing skills in the future.

提案: 回答中语法和表达不够准确（如"seem to my family is indispensable"），且内容稍显混乱。建议直接回答想为谁唱歌，并用具体例子支持观点，注意句子结构。

例: I want to sing for my family because it helps me show my love and appreciation. For example, last week my sister sang to our parents, and they were very touched.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和重复（如"bring happiness and bring happiness"），表达不清晰。建议简洁表达观点，避免重复，并用连词使句子连贯。

例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness. For example, my best friend Karina was feeling very depressed, but when I sang to her, it gave her hope and comfort.

× So I think seeing is definitely not my cup of tea.

✓ So I think singing is definitely not my cup of tea.

这里'seeing'是拼写错误，正确的词是'singing'，因为上下文讨论的是唱歌。

× I used to, uh, learn saying.

✓ I used to, uh, learn singing.

'learn saying'中的'saying'用错了，应该是'singing'，表示学习唱歌。

× I'm more inclined towards singing in the future.

✓ I'm more inclined to sing in the future.

'inclined'后面搭配不定式'to do'更合适，'inclined towards'虽然存在，但在这里用不定式更自然。

× Well, I'm with the idea that seem to my family is indispensable as it enables me to express my love and gratitude towards them.

✓ Well, I believe that singing to my family is indispensable as it enables me to express my love and gratitude towards them.

原句中'I'm with the idea that seem to my family'结构不正确，应该用'I believe that singing to my family'，使句子通顺且语法正确。

× Oh, it reminds me of something happened last week.

✓ Oh, it reminds me of something that happened last week.

'something happened'缺少关系代词'that'，需要加上使句子完整。

× My sister sang a song to my parents and they were really moved by by her melody and words.

✓ My sister sang a song to my parents and they were really moved by her melody and words.

句中重复了'by'，应删除多余的一个。

× Take my bestie Karina as an example, who tend to feel depressed and nearly suicide,

✓ Take my bestie Karina as an example, who tends to feel depressed and nearly commit suicide,

'who'指代单数，动词应加-s变为'tends'；'nearly suicide'表达不完整，需改为'nearly commit suicide'。

× but when I sing a song to her, it brings happiness and bring happiness and hope to her.

✓ but when I sing a song to her, it brings happiness and hope to her.

'brings'后面不应再重复'bring happiness'，去掉重复部分。

× From my perspective, this phenomenon can be willing to sentimental reasons.

✓ From my perspective, this phenomenon can be due to sentimental reasons.

'can be willing to'用法错误，应改为'can be due to'表示原因。