Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答表达了喜欢唱歌的原因，但存在重复用词和语法错误，且句子结构不够自然。建议避免重复，使用更准确的表达，并且注意时态和词汇的正确使用。

例: Yes, I enjoy singing because it helps me relieve stress and feel relaxed. Especially when I listen to my favorite songs, I feel energized and joyful.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和表达不清晰的问题，且句子冗长且重复。建议简洁明了地回答问题，注意时态和词汇的准确使用。

例: I learned to sing during music classes when I was in junior high school, but I haven't practiced singing for many years.

提案: 回答内容较好，表达了想为谁唱歌及原因，但可以使用更多连接词使句子更流畅自然。

例: I would like to sing for the people I love, such as my parents, close friends, and teachers, because I want to express my appreciation and gratitude to them.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不清晰的问题，建议使用更准确的词汇和句子结构，并避免重复。

例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness to people. When people listen to songs, they often feel joyful and it is a great way to express emotions and feelings.

× I like singing because it can help help me release my pressure and make me relaxed.

✓ I like singing because it can help me release my pressure and make me relaxed.

这里“help help”是重复错误，应去掉一个“help”。

× Especially when I am seeing my favorite songs I I can feel that I am full of energy and joyful.

✓ Especially when I am listening to my favorite songs, I can feel that I am full of energy and joyful.

“seeing my favorite songs”不合适，应该用“listening to my favorite songs”，因为歌曲是听的，不是看的。

× Well, I only learned how to sing in music classes in my when I was a purple and when I when I'm in junior high school.

✓ Well, I only learned how to sing in music classes when I was in junior high school.

句子中“in my when I was a purple and when I when I'm in junior high school”结构混乱且有错误，应简化为“when I was in junior high school”。

× Umm, I must say that I haven't learned to sing sing a song many years since I have.

✓ Umm, I must say that I haven't learned to sing a song for many years.

“haven't learned to sing sing a song many years since I have”结构错误，应该用“haven't learned to sing a song for many years”表示“很多年没学唱歌了”。

× Hmm yes, especially when they when people are seeing a sing a song, they laughed very much.

✓ Hmm yes, especially when people are singing a song, they laugh a lot.

“seeing a sing a song”错误，应为“singing a song”；“they laughed very much”时态不对，应为一般现在时“they laugh a lot”，因为是在描述普遍现象。

× Umm singing is a very great method for people to express their feelings, express their emotion.

✓ Umm, singing is a great way for people to express their feelings and emotions.

“a very great method”表达不自然，改为“a great way”更合适；“express their feelings, express their emotion”重复，改为“express their feelings and emotions”。