Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally good but can be improved by correcting grammar (e.g., 'a artistic' should be 'an artistic') and making sentences more concise and natural. Also, avoid redundancy and try to use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, I love singing because it is an artistic way to express my inner feelings. I have been exposed to singing since childhood because my father, who is a singer, used to practice with me.

提案: Your answer is relevant but can be clearer and more natural. Avoid repeating 'from my father' twice. Also, explain briefly what you learned or how you practiced singing. Use linking words to connect ideas.

例: Yes, I have learnt singing from my father, who is a professional singer. He shared his lyrics and projects with me, and I often gave feedback on his previous work, which helped me improve my skills.

提案: Your answer needs clearer structure and grammar correction. Try to express your opinion more naturally and avoid awkward phrasing like 'more like than business comparing to art'. Use linking words to explain your reasons.

例: I want to sing only for myself because I dislike the commercial side of singing. For me, singing is an art, not a business, so I prefer to enjoy it personally rather than professionally.

提案: Your answer has good ideas but is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Avoid using words like 'propaganda' and 'cautious' incorrectly. Try to explain how music spreads ideas and brings people together with clearer language and linking words.

例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness because music connects people and helps spread ideas more easily. When messages are shared through songs, more people can understand and accept them.

× I think singing is a artistic expression by which you can expose your inner feelings.

✓ I think singing is an artistic expression by which you can expose your inner feelings.

The article 'a' should be 'an' before a word starting with a vowel sound like 'artistic'. This is a common article usage rule in English.

× I got the exposure with singing since my childhood because my father was a singer and he used to practice singing with me.

✓ I have had exposure to singing since my childhood because my father was a singer and he used to practice singing with me.

The phrase 'got the exposure with singing since my childhood' is incorrect because 'since' requires present perfect tense to indicate an action continuing from the past to present. Also, 'got the exposure with singing' is awkward; 'have had exposure to singing' is more natural.

× I often gave ratings of his previous work.

✓ I often gave ratings to his previous work.

The verb 'gave ratings' should be followed by 'to' when indicating the object receiving the ratings. Also, 'gave' is correct past tense here as the action happened in the past.

× I want to sing for only myself because I don't love the singing corporate culture because it's more like than business comparing to art, so I love to make it for art.

✓ I want to sing only for myself because I don't love the corporate singing culture since it's more like business compared to art, so I love to make it for art.

The phrase 'more like than business comparing to art' is incorrect. It should be 'more like business compared to art'. Also, 'singing corporate culture' is better as 'corporate singing culture'. The prepositions and word order are corrected for clarity.

× It's a great way to connect people because you often face difficulty to spread an ideology or even a propaganda, but when it's by spread through music then more people can accept this.

✓ It's a great way to connect people because you often face difficulty spreading an ideology or even propaganda, but when it's spread through music, more people can accept it.

The phrase 'face difficulty to spread' is incorrect; it should be 'face difficulty spreading'. Also, 'by spread through music' is incorrect; it should be 'spread through music'. The sentence is corrected for proper verb forms and prepositions.

× This is both cautious.

✓ This is very effective.

The phrase 'This is both cautious' is incorrect and unclear. Possibly the intended meaning is 'This is very effective' or 'This is beneficial'. 'Cautious' is an adjective describing a person or action, not a situation like this. The correction improves clarity and appropriateness.