Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn có ý tưởng tốt nhưng có một số lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng chưa chính xác, ví dụ như 'at least my mood' nên là 'lifts my mood'. Bạn nên sử dụng các liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp để câu trả lời tự nhiên và hiệu quả hơn.

例: Yes, I love singing because it helps me relax after a long day, especially on weekends. I enjoy singing with my friend at a place called Music Park. Singing together not only lifts my mood but also strengthens our friendship.

提案: Bạn cần chú ý đến thì động từ và số nhiều/số ít, ví dụ 'I have learned' nên đi với 'when I was' là đúng nhưng 'I take many a class' nên là 'I took many classes'. Ngoài ra, câu trả lời nên có liên từ để kết nối ý và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp để tự nhiên hơn.

例: I learned how to sing when I was in primary school. I took many classes where I received basic vocal training and learned about pitch and rhythm. Singing not only helps me feel excited and relaxed, but it is also a great way to improve my confidence.

提案: Bạn cần chú ý đến số nhiều/số ít và chia động từ cho đúng, ví dụ 'which motivate' nên là 'which motivates', 'Singing for them make' nên là 'makes'. Ngoài ra, bạn nên dùng các liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc và tự nhiên hơn.

例: I would like to sing for my close friends because they are very supportive and always appreciate my thoughts, which motivates me to perform better. Singing for them makes me feel confident and comfortable. In addition, sharing music with them creates a warm and joyful atmosphere.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và thiếu sự liên kết ý, ví dụ 'singing aloud individuals' không đúng cấu trúc, câu cuối không rõ nghĩa. Bạn nên luyện tập cách sử dụng cấu trúc câu đúng và thêm các liên từ để câu trả lời rõ ràng và mạch lạc hơn.

例: Of course, I believe that singing allows individuals to express their emotions freely and is a great way to relieve stress. For example, many people feel happy and joyful when they sing their favorite songs.

× I enjoy singing with my friend at the Place Call Music Parks.

✓ I enjoy singing with my friends at the Place Called Music Park.

The phrase 'my friend' should be plural 'my friends' to match the context of singing together. Also, 'Place Call Music Parks' seems to be a name error; it should be 'Place Called Music Park' for correct noun phrase usage.

× Singing together not only at least my mood but also strengthen our friendship.

✓ Singing together not only lifts my mood but also strengthens our friendship.

The phrase 'not only at least my mood but also strengthen' is incorrect. The correct correlative conjunction is 'not only... but also' and the verbs should agree in number and tense: 'lifts' and 'strengthens'.

× I have learned how to sing when I was in primary school.

✓ I learned how to sing when I was in primary school.

The use of present perfect 'have learned' is incorrect with the specific past time 'when I was in primary school'. Simple past 'learned' is appropriate here.

× I take many a class where I receive basic vocal training and learn about pitch and rhythm.

✓ I took many classes where I received basic vocal training and learned about pitch and rhythm.

The verb tense should be past to match the past time frame. Also, 'many a class' is awkward; 'many classes' is more natural and plural to match 'many'.

× Singing not only help me feel excited and relax, but also a great way to improve my confidence.

✓ Singing not only helps me feel excited and relaxed, but is also a great way to improve my confidence.

The verb 'help' should be 'helps' to agree with singular subject 'Singing'. Also, 'relax' should be 'relaxed' to parallel 'feel excited'. The phrase needs 'is' before 'also a great way' for correct sentence structure.

× Singing for them make me feel confident and comfortable.

✓ Singing for them makes me feel confident and comfortable.

The verb 'make' should be 'makes' to agree with singular subject 'Singing'.

× sharing music with them create a warm and joyful atmosphere.

✓ sharing music with them creates a warm and joyful atmosphere.

The verb 'create' should be 'creates' to agree with singular subject 'sharing music'.

× I would like to sing my close friends because they are very supportive and always appreciate my thought, which motivate me to perform better.

✓ I would like to sing for my close friends because they are very supportive and always appreciate my thoughts, which motivate me to perform better.

The verb 'motivate' should be 'motivates' to agree with singular relative pronoun 'which' referring to 'appreciation'. Also, 'sing my close friends' is incorrect; it should be 'sing for my close friends'. 'Thought' should be plural 'thoughts'.

× Of course, I believe that singing aloud individuals to express their emotion freely and a great way to relieve stress.

✓ Of course, I believe that singing allows individuals to express their emotions freely and is a great way to relieve stress.

The verb 'allows' is missing and needed to connect 'singing' and 'individuals'. 'Emotion' should be plural 'emotions' to match 'their'. Also, 'and a great way' needs 'is' to be grammatically correct.