Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不自然的问题，例如“didn't sing myself”应为“don't sing myself”，且句子较长且有些重复。建议简化句子结构，避免冗余，并使用更自然的表达方式。

例: No, I don't like singing because I don't have a good singing voice. Although people say I have a nice speaking voice, I struggle to hit high notes and my voice often breaks.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和拼写错误，如“didn't excel for it”应为“didn't excel at it”，“high nose”应为“high notes”。句子结构不够清晰，建议使用更准确的词汇和简洁的句子表达。

例: Yes, my mum enrolled me in singing lessons when I was a child because I was interested. However, I didn't excel at it, and after puberty, I struggled to hit high notes, so I stopped taking lessons.

提案: 回答表达不清晰，语法错误较多，如“Shouldn't I would sing”不符合语法规则。建议直接回答问题，使用简单明了的句子，并避免使用模糊或不合适的表达。

例: I don't sing well, but if I had to sing for someone, it would be my future children when they are babies because they might enjoy the sound even if they don't understand the words.

提案: 回答内容较好，但部分表达不够自然，如“if the soul is so well”不太通顺。建议使用更自然的表达方式，并适当增加细节使回答更具体。

例: Yes, I believe singing and music can bring happiness because they express emotions. When I feel down, I listen to inspirational songs to lift my mood, and I think many people do the same.

× No, I like listening to other things but I didn't sing myself.

✓ No, I like listening to other things but I don't sing myself.

这里描述的是现在的习惯动作，应该使用一般现在时，而不是过去时。将'didn't sing'改为'don't sing'更符合语境。

× People say you have a good speaking voice but it does not translate to if you have a good singing voice.

✓ People say you have a good speaking voice but it does not translate to having a good singing voice.

动词短语'translate to'后面应接动名词形式，不能直接接从句。将'if you have'改为'having'使句子结构正确。

× Yes, my mum enrolled me in singing lessons when I was a kid because I was interested in them but I didn't excel for it.

✓ Yes, my mum enrolled me in singing lessons when I was a kid because I was interested in them but I didn't excel at it.

动词'excel'后应接介词'at'，而不是'for'。此外，时态使用正确。将'for'改为'at'。

× When I hit puberty it was all done all downhill because I can't hit the high nose, so I stopped.

✓ When I hit puberty it all went downhill because I couldn't hit the high notes, so I stopped.

表达过去发生的事情，应该使用过去时态。'can't'应改为'couldn't'，'nose'应为'notes'。此外，'it was all done all downhill'表达不自然，改为'it all went downhill'更合适。

× When I hit puberty it was all done all downhill because I can't hit the high nose, so I stopped.

✓ When I hit puberty it was all done all downhill because I can't hit the high notes, so I stopped.

单词'nose'拼写错误，应为'notes'，表示音符。

× Since I don't know how to sing well, if I have to sing for somebody, it would be my future.

✓ Since I don't know how to sing well, if I have to sing for somebody, it would be my future children.

'my future'表达不完整，缺少名词，应该明确指代'我的未来孩子'，使句子完整。

× Shouldn't I would sing to them when they are still babies so they are not able to comprehend my voice?

✓ I would sing to them when they are still babies so they are not able to comprehend my voice.

句中' Shouldn't I would sing'结构错误，混用了情态动词和助动词。应去掉'Shouldn't'，直接用'I would sing'。

× Yes, people say music is a language they appreciate so it can bring happiness if the soul is so well.

✓ Yes, people say music is a language they appreciate so it can bring happiness if the soul is well.

'if the soul is so well'中'so'多余且不合适，应去掉。

× When I am feeling down, I am listening to inspirational songs to uplift myself and I know others do the same.

✓ When I am feeling down, I listen to inspirational songs to uplift myself and I know others do the same.

描述习惯性动作时，应该用一般现在时，'I am listening'改为'I listen'更合适。