Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally clear and relevant, but it contains some redundancy and filler words like 'uh' which reduce fluency. Try to make your response more concise and natural by avoiding unnecessary phrases and focusing on the main point. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, I enjoy singing, but only when I'm alone at home. I usually sing songs I love because I'm too shy to perform in front of others.

提案: Your answer is understandable but somewhat repetitive and lacks coherence. Avoid repeating similar ideas and use linking words to improve flow. Also, try to use more precise vocabulary and correct grammar, for example, 'singing classes' instead of 'sing classes'.

例: No, I have never learned how to sing because my mother did not allow me to attend singing classes. She believes that singers are not very successful, so she discouraged me from pursuing it.

提案: Your answer is relevant and clear, but it can be improved by reducing redundancy and using linking words to connect ideas. Also, try to avoid informal phrases like 'you know' and use more varied vocabulary to express your feelings.

例: As I mentioned earlier, I prefer singing alone at home because I am too shy to perform for others. I usually sing when I am bored, and it serves as an enjoyable hobby to pass the time.

提案: Your answer is positive and provides examples, which is good. However, try to organize your ideas more clearly using linking words and avoid informal phrases like 'you know'. Also, be careful with grammar and sentence structure to make your answer more natural and effective.

例: Absolutely. For example, when people attend concerts or watch street performers, they often appear happier than usual. Therefore, I believe singing can bring joy to people, especially those who feel depressed.

× I usually try singing some songs that I love.

✓ I usually try to sing some songs that I love.

The verb 'try' is followed by the infinitive form 'to sing' when expressing an attempt to do something. Using the gerund 'singing' after 'try' can imply experimenting with singing, but here the intended meaning is attempting to sing songs, so 'try to sing' is correct.

× But you should ask this question of someone who has that kind of good voices that can sing for others.

✓ But you should ask this question of someone who has that kind of good voice and can sing for others.

The word 'voices' is plural, but 'that kind of' refers to a singular type, so 'voice' should be singular. Also, the sentence structure is improved by connecting the clauses with 'and' instead of 'that' to clarify meaning.

× No, I actually never learned how to sing because my mom never allowed me to do it.

✓ No, I actually have never learned how to sing because my mom has never allowed me to do it.

The present perfect tense ('have never learned', 'has never allowed') is more appropriate here to indicate experiences up to the present, rather than simple past which refers to completed actions in the past.

× But I always love to go to sing classes if my mom allows me.

✓ But I would always love to go to singing classes if my mom allowed me.

The phrase 'go to sing classes' is incorrect; the correct form is 'go to singing classes' using the gerund as a noun. Also, the conditional mood fits better here ('would love' and 'if my mom allowed') to express hypothetical desire.

× But she feels like singers aren't really successful people and they can do anything to make the world better, so she never allowed me to go to this kind of classes.

✓ But she feels like singers aren't really successful people and they can't do anything to make the world better, so she never allowed me to go to this kind of class.

The sentence contradicts itself by saying 'they can do anything' when the intended meaning is negative, so 'can't' is correct. Also, 'this kind of classes' is incorrect; 'this kind of class' or 'these kinds of classes' is correct because 'kind' is singular.

× I usually sing for myself alone at home, and you know, I'm too shy to sing for other people, so I usually do it when I'm bored or when I don't have any other things to do.

✓ I usually sing for myself alone at home, and you know, I'm too shy to sing for other people, so I usually do it when I'm bored or when I don't have anything else to do.

The phrase 'any other things' is awkward; 'anything else' is more natural and grammatically correct when referring to unspecified activities.

× For the example when you go to concerts or you know those theaters or when people are singing in the street, everyone looks so happy, everyone listening to them and they look happier than they are usually.

✓ For example, when you go to concerts or those theaters, or when people are singing in the street, everyone looks so happy, everyone is listening to them and they look happier than they usually are.

The phrase 'For the example' should be 'For example'. Also, 'everyone listening to them' lacks a verb and should be 'everyone is listening to them'. The phrase 'than they are usually' should be 'than they usually are' for correct adverb placement.