Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more natural and grammatically correct by using simpler sentence structures and avoiding redundancy. For example, say "I like singing because the words and music create a positive atmosphere and express my feelings."

例: Yes, I like singing because the words and music create a positive atmosphere and help me express my feelings.

提案: Make your answer clearer and more coherent by using linking words and correcting grammar. For example, say "No, I haven't learnt how to sing formally, but when I was in primary school, we used to sing songs during music lessons with our teacher."

例: No, I haven't learnt how to sing formally, but when I was in primary school, we used to sing songs during music lessons with our teacher.

提案: Improve coherence by linking your ideas and using more natural expressions. For example, say "I usually sing for my daughter at home because singing helps her learn. It's a fun way to support her education."

例: I usually sing for my daughter at home because singing helps her learn. It's a fun way to support her education.

提案: Make your answer more natural and avoid repetition. For example, say "Definitely yes, because singing creates a positive atmosphere and most people enjoy it."

例: Definitely yes, because singing creates a positive atmosphere and most people enjoy it.

× Yes, I like singing because I find myself attached to the words and the music of songs and creates a positive environment around me and about my feelings.

✓ Yes, I like singing because I find myself attached to the words and the music of songs and it creates a positive environment around me and about my feelings.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'creates' without a clear subject. Adding 'it' clarifies the subject performing the action, ensuring correct verb agreement and sentence clarity.

× No, but at the school, when I was in the primary school, we used to sing songs and the music lesson with our teacher.

✓ No, but at school, when I was in primary school, we used to sing songs and have music lessons with our teacher.

The phrase 'at the school' is better as 'at school' for general reference. Also, 'the music lesson' should be plural 'music lessons' and 'have' is needed to correctly express the activity. This corrects tense and article usage for natural expression.

× I usually sing for my daughter at home because I provide her with the learning materials through singing.

✓ I usually sing to my daughter at home because I provide her with learning materials through singing.

The preposition 'sing for' is less appropriate here; 'sing to' is the correct phrase when directing singing towards someone. Also, 'the learning materials' is better as 'learning materials' without 'the' for general meaning.

× Definitely yes, because it provides a positive atmosphere around people and almost all people enjoy singing and songs.

✓ Definitely yes, because it provides a positive atmosphere around people and almost everyone enjoys singing and songs.

'Almost all people' is less natural than 'almost everyone' when referring to people in general. This correction improves naturalness and clarity.