Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答表达了不喜欢唱歌的原因，但语言不够自然，句子结构混乱，且有语法错误。建议简化句子结构，使用更自然的表达方式，并注意时态和词汇的准确使用。

例: To be honest, I don't like singing because when I was a child, I felt shy and uncomfortable singing in front of others.

提案: 回答内容较为完整，但句子重复且语法错误较多。建议避免重复表达，注意主谓一致，并用更简洁的句子表达观点。

例: Yes, in China, primary school students have basic music lessons, so I learned how to sing, but I haven't taken any advanced singing classes.

提案: 回答中有语法和用词错误，句子不够连贯。建议使用连词连接句子，表达更清晰自然，同时注意词汇的准确使用。

例: I rarely sing in daily life, but when I am invited to a friend's birthday party, I am willing to sing for them. Singing a birthday song helps me express my happiness and best wishes.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和词汇使用不当，句子结构重复。建议使用更准确的词汇，避免重复，并用连词使句子更流畅。

例: Of course, music can bring happiness. When people listen to songs, they often feel relaxed. My friends say singing helps them express their emotions and feel joyful.

× when I was a child I find my scene is not real

✓ when I was a child I found my scene was not real

这里描述的是过去的情况，应该使用过去时态。原句中使用了现在时态“find”，应改为过去时态“found”。

× I feel ashamed to seem in other people's face

✓ I feel ashamed to be seen in other people's faces

动词“seem”用错，应为被动形式“be seen”，且“face”应为复数“faces”，表示“在别人面前”。

× everyone in China have learned the music

✓ everyone in China has learned music

“everyone”是单数，谓语动词应使用单数形式“has”。“the music”前的定冠词不必要，直接用“music”。

× have learned how to sing, but I don't have more advanced singing, singing lessons

✓ have learned how to sing, but I haven't had more advanced singing lessons

“singing lessons”是复数，前面应加“more advanced”修饰，且否定句中应使用完成时态“haven't had”。

× I seldom seem in my daily life

✓ I seldom sing in my daily life

“seem”用错，应为“sing”，表示“唱歌”。

× I'm willing to sing for them

✓ I am willing to sing for them

缩写形式“I'm”在正式口语中可以接受，但为保持正式，建议使用完整形式“I am”。

× I think through the birthday song. I can express my happiness to my friend and express the best wishes to them that make me satisfied

✓ I think through the birthday song, I can express my happiness to my friend and send my best wishes to them, which makes me satisfied

原句断句不当，应合并为一句，且“express the best wishes”改为“send my best wishes”，“that make me satisfied”改为“which makes me satisfied”，保持主谓一致。

× the music melody is very happiness

✓ the music melody is very happy

“happiness”是名词，形容词应为“happy”，用来描述“melody”。

× they may be feel very relaxed

✓ they may feel very relaxed

“may be feel”结构错误，应为“may feel”，情态动词后直接接动词原形。

× they always felt relaxed and happiness

✓ they always felt relaxed and happy

“happiness”是名词，形容词应为“happy”，用来描述感受。