Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答较为自然且内容丰富，但句子较长且有些重复，建议简化表达，避免冗余，同时适当使用连接词使表达更流畅。

例: Yes, I love singing because it helps me reduce stress and improves my mood. Moreover, it allows me to switch to a positive mindset quickly.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不清，建议注意时态和句子结构，使用连贯的句子表达经历。

例: Yes, when I was about eight years old, my parents took me to a music class where I learned how to sing for about two years.

提案: 回答中有重复和语法错误，建议简洁明了地表达观点，并使用连接词使句子更连贯。

例: I want to sing for my parents because they gave me the opportunity to learn singing and inspired my interest in music.

提案: 回答表达了观点，但存在语法错误和用词不当，建议注意句子结构和词汇选择，使表达更自然。

例: Yes, singing definitely brings happiness. When I sing with my friends, I feel relaxed and enjoy the comfortable atmosphere.

× Yes, when I was a child, as about 8 years old, my parents. Bring me to a music class and I have studied it for about two years on how to sing a song more.

✓ Yes, when I was a child, at about 8 years old, my parents brought me to a music class and I studied it for about two years to learn how to sing songs better.

句中“Bring”应使用过去式“brought”，因为描述的是过去发生的动作；“have studied”改为一般过去时“studied”，与时间状语“for about two years”连用，表示过去持续的动作。建议注意动词时态与时间状语的一致性。

× Yes, when I was a child, as about 8 years old, my parents. Bring me to a music class and I have studied it for about two years on how to sing a song more.

✓ Yes, when I was a child, at about 8 years old, my parents brought me to a music class and I studied it for about two years to learn how to sing songs better.

“as about 8 years old”中的“as”用法不当，应改为“at”，表示具体年龄点。建议学习常用时间和年龄的介词用法。

× I want to sing for my parents because they gave the chance to learn how to sing properly and give me chance to gain a interest of singing songs.

✓ I want to sing for my parents because they gave me the chance to learn how to sing properly and gave me the chance to develop an interest in singing songs.

“gave the chance”缺少宾语，应为“gave me the chance”；“gain a interest”中“a”与“interest”搭配错误，应为“an interest”；“gain interest”表达不自然，改为“develop an interest”更合适。建议注意冠词和固定搭配的使用。

× I want to sing for my parents because they gave the chance to learn how to sing properly and give me chance to gain a interest of singing songs.

✓ I want to sing for my parents because they gave me the chance to learn how to sing properly and gave me the chance to develop an interest in singing songs.

“give me chance”应使用过去式“gave me the chance”，与前文“gave”保持时态一致。建议注意时态一致性。

× Yes, it definitely thing can bring a lot of happiness for people.

✓ Yes, it definitely can bring a lot of happiness to people.

“definitely thing”中“thing”多余，应去掉；“bring a lot of happiness for people”中介词应为“to”，表示带给某人某物。建议注意多余词汇和介词搭配。

× I always sing with my friends and during the time I sing with them I feel more relaxed and more comfortable at the atmosphere there.

✓ I always sing with my friends and during the time I sing with them I feel more relaxed and more comfortable in the atmosphere there.

“comfortable at the atmosphere”中介词应为“in”，表示处于某种环境中。建议学习常用介词搭配。