Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答时应避免重复表达，如“like my voice”和“trust my voice can make a beautiful tone”意思相近，建议简化并更自然地表达。同时，句子较长且缺少连贯的连接词，建议使用连接词使表达更流畅。

例: Yes, I really enjoy singing because I believe my voice sounds pleasant. Moreover, I love sharing songs with others to bring them joy.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误，如“haven't learn”应为“haven't learned”，且“learn diet”可能是笔误，应为“learn to sing”。表达不够清晰，建议简化句子并使用正确的时态和词汇。

例: No, I haven't learned how to sing formally because I haven't had the chance. However, I practice by myself and watch online tutorials to improve.

提案: 回答中语法错误较多，如“sing makes me”应为“singing makes me”，“would makes me”应为“would make me”。建议注意动名词的使用和主谓一致，同时句子结构可以更简洁。

例: I like to sing for myself because singing helps me relax and feel happy, especially when I'm nervous.

提案: 回答中表达不够自然，语法错误较多，如“can be bringing”应为“can bring”，“music is the one word”表达不准确。建议使用更准确的表达和简洁的句子。

例: Yes, I definitely think singing can bring happiness because music is a universal language that everyone understands.

× I love singing so much because I like my voice and I trust my voice can make a beautiful tone and I really like to sing a song for other people.

✓ I love singing so much because I like my voice and I trust my voice can make a beautiful tone, and I really like singing songs for other people.

这里的错误是动词形式使用不当。'like to sing a song'可以改为'like singing songs'，因为前面已经用了'singing'，保持形式一致更自然。建议在表达喜欢做某事时，使用动名词形式。

× No, I haven't learn how to sing before because I don't have an opportunity to learn diet.

✓ No, I haven't learned how to sing before because I haven't had an opportunity to learn it.

这里使用了现在完成时态'haven't learn'，动词应该用过去分词形式'learned'。另外，'learn diet'不合适，应该是'learn it'或'learn to sing'。

× I'm always saying by myself and searching some knowledge online to let let them teach me how to sing.

✓ I'm always practicing by myself and searching for some knowledge online to let them teach me how to sing.

'saying by myself'用词不当，应该是'practicing by myself'。另外，'searching some knowledge'缺少介词，应该是'searching for some knowledge'。重复的'let'也应去掉。

× I would say I want to sing for myself because sing makes me feel more relaxed when I feel nervous.

✓ I would say I want to sing for myself because singing makes me feel more relaxed when I feel nervous.

'sing'作为动词在这里应使用动名词形式'singing'，表示动作的持续或习惯。

× So if I can sing a song for myself I think that would makes me relax and happy.

✓ So if I can sing a song for myself, I think that would make me relaxed and happy.

'would makes'主谓不一致，正确形式是'would make'。另外，'relax'应改为形容词'relaxed'，表示感受。

× Yes, I definitely think singing can be bringing happiness to people because music is the one word that all over the world people can understand what you want, what you want to say.

✓ Yes, I definitely think singing can bring happiness to people because music is the one language that people all over the world can understand what you want to say.

'can be bringing'时态和语态使用不当，应该用'can bring'。'the one word'应改为'the one language'更符合语境。句子结构也需调整使表达更清晰。