Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally good but a bit repetitive and slightly unclear at the end. Try to avoid redundancy and make your sentences more concise and natural. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: I enjoy singing because it helps me relieve stress after a long day. Moreover, singing with friends creates a fun and relaxing atmosphere during our free time, which makes it even more enjoyable.

提案: Your answer is clear but could be improved by using more precise vocabulary and linking words to make your opinion stronger and more coherent.

例: Actually, I have never taken formal singing lessons because I believe singing is a natural ability. When people feel like singing, it usually comes naturally without needing to learn.

提案: Your answer is understandable but contains some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Try to use correct sentence structures and avoid repeating the same words. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas.

例: If I had a boyfriend, I would love to sing romantic songs for him. Additionally, singing love songs together would be a wonderful way to express my feelings.

提案: Your answer is incomplete and has grammatical mistakes. Try to complete your thoughts clearly and use linking words to explain your ideas logically. Also, avoid vague expressions like 'no mood'.

例: I believe singing can bring happiness to many people because music is comforting. For example, when people feel sad or stressed, singing can help improve their mood and make them feel better.

× Because I love singing, singing feels like a perfect way.

✓ Because I love singing, it feels like the perfect way.

The original sentence is incomplete and awkward. 'Singing feels like a perfect way' lacks an object or complement. Replacing the second 'singing' with 'it' clarifies the subject and completes the sentence structure.

× Well, to be honest, I never learned how to sing.

✓ Well, to be honest, I have never learned how to sing.

The present perfect tense 'have never learned' is more appropriate here because the action relates to the experience up to the present moment, not a specific past time.

× I think people don't need to learn how to sing, it's just natural when you want to sing.

✓ I think people don't need to learn how to sing because it's just natural when you want to sing.

The original sentence is a comma splice, joining two independent clauses with a comma. Using 'because' properly connects the ideas and corrects the sentence structure.

× I think every time I imagine if I have a boyfriend, I want to sing for my boyfriend a romantic song or I want to sing a love song together with my boyfriend.

✓ I think whenever I imagine having a boyfriend, I want to sing a romantic song for him or sing a love song together with him.

The original sentence is awkward and redundant. 'Every time I imagine if I have' is incorrect; 'whenever I imagine having' is clearer. Also, 'sing for my boyfriend a romantic song' is better as 'sing a romantic song for him' for natural word order.

× Yeah, that would be great way to express my feeling too.

✓ Yeah, that would be a great way to express my feelings too.

The sentence is missing the article 'a' before 'great way' and 'feeling' should be plural 'feelings' to match the context.

× For most people singing or music they are like a comforting thing.

✓ For most people, singing or music is like a comforting thing.

The original sentence has a subject-verb agreement and sentence structure issue. 'Singing or music' is singular, so the verb should be 'is' not 'are'. Also, a comma after 'people' improves clarity.

× When people have no mood, singing really helps to.

✓ When people are in a bad mood, singing really helps.

'Have no mood' is unnatural; 'are in a bad mood' is the correct expression. Also, 'helps to' is incomplete; it should be 'helps' or 'helps to improve mood'.