Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答表达了喜欢唱歌的原因，但句子结构不够自然，存在语法错误和重复表达。建议使用更自然的表达方式，避免重复，并且注意语法，如使用正确的时态和词汇搭配。

例: Yes, I like singing because it helps me relax and forget my stress. It also brings me joy and allows me to practice hitting high notes.

提案: 回答不够清晰，表达混乱，语法错误较多。建议直接回答问题，使用简单明了的句子，并且注意时态和词汇的正确使用。

例: I haven't taken professional singing classes, but I often sing with friends who are learning new songs. This helps me practice and improve my singing skills.

提案: 回答中有语法和词汇错误，如'seeing level'应为'singing ability'。建议使用更准确的词汇，表达更清晰，并且注意句子结构的完整性。

例: Actually, I'm not sure because I haven't been involved in singing professionally. Also, I'm quite shy and I think my singing ability is not very good, so I usually don't sing for others.

提案: 回答表达了观点，但存在语法错误和重复。建议使用更自然的表达，注意单词拼写（如'seeing'应为'singing'），并且避免重复。

例: Yes, absolutely. I believe singing can bring happiness because it helps people relax, forget their stress, and boosts confidence. Therefore, singing is a great way to unwind.

× Yes I do. When I want to relax I will sing. I think it can let me forget my stressful and it can get me some fun and it can protect me to sing the high notes.

✓ Yes I do. When I want to relax, I will sing. I think it can help me forget my stress, give me some fun, and help me protect my voice when singing high notes.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'stressful' as a noun and 'protect me to sing' which is ungrammatical. 'Stressful' is an adjective; the noun form 'stress' should be used. Also, 'protect me to sing' should be 'help me protect my voice when singing' to correctly use the verb + -ing form and express the intended meaning.

× Yes or not, I mean, I'm not ever going to the profession music class, but I often sing with the people who are start to sing the songs, who are first sing these songs.

✓ No, I mean, I've never gone to professional music classes, but I often sing with people who are starting to sing songs, who were the first to sing these songs.

The sentence has incorrect tense usage: 'I'm not ever going' should be 'I've never gone' to express past experience. 'Who are start to sing' should be 'who are starting to sing' to use the present participle correctly. 'Who are first sing' should be 'who were the first to sing' to use past tense and infinitive form properly.

× It can practice me how to learn, yes.

✓ It can help me practice how to learn, yes.

The phrase 'practice me' is incorrect; 'practice' is a verb that requires an object of the activity, so 'help me practice' is correct. Also, 'how to learn' is fine as an infinitive phrase here.

× Actually, I'm not sure because I'm not diving in that world before.

✓ Actually, I'm not sure because I've never dived into that world before.

The phrase 'I'm not diving in that world before' incorrectly uses present continuous tense with a past time reference. The present perfect 'I've never dived' is appropriate to express an experience up to now.

× But you know, I'm very shy and sometimes I think my seeing level was so poor.

✓ But you know, I'm very shy and sometimes I think my singing level is very poor.

The word 'seeing' is a wrong pronoun or word choice here; it should be 'singing' to match the context. Also, 'was so poor' should be 'is very poor' to maintain present tense consistency.

× So I don't sing for anyone.

✓ So I don't sing for anyone.

This sentence is grammatically correct and fits the present tense context; no correction needed.

× Yes, absolutely. Yes. I think seeing can bring happiness to people.

✓ Yes, absolutely. Yes. I think singing can bring happiness to people.

The word 'seeing' is incorrect here; it should be 'singing' to match the topic and meaning.

× It's a thing that we can relax and it can let us to forget the stressful and it can give me some confidence.

✓ It's something that helps us relax, lets us forget stress, and gives me some confidence.

'It's a thing that we can relax' is awkward; 'helps us relax' is better. 'Let us to forget' is incorrect; 'let us forget' is correct without 'to'. 'The stressful' is incorrect; 'stress' is the correct noun. Also, pronoun consistency is improved by using 'us' and 'me' appropriately.

× So I think when you want to relax in, it's the best choice.

✓ So I think when you want to relax, it's the best choice.

The phrase 'relax in' is incorrect; 'relax' does not require the preposition 'in' here. Removing 'in' corrects the sentence structure.