Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答时应避免重复表达，如“I really love it”与前面内容重复。句子结构应更自然流畅，避免语法错误，如“relax myself”应为“relax”。建议简洁明了地表达观点，并用连接词使句子更连贯。

例: Yes, I love singing because it helps me relax and feel happy. When I sing, I can forget about my worries and enjoy the moment.

提案: 回答中“normal lesson”表达不够准确，建议使用“formal singing lessons”。结尾的“Yes”显得多余，应避免。回答应更连贯，使用连接词如“but”或“however”来丰富内容。

例: No, I have never taken formal singing lessons. However, I watch videos online and practice to improve my voice because singing is just a hobby for me.

提案: 回答内容具体且有感情，但句子较长且缺少适当的连接词。注意主谓一致，如“who take care”应为“who takes care”。建议分句表达，使用连接词如“because”、“so that”使表达更清晰。

例: I want to sing for my mom because she is hardworking and caring. Singing for her shows my gratitude and makes her feel appreciated, which is meaningful for both of us.

提案: 回答中出现拼写错误“seeing”应为“singing”，影响理解。句子较长，建议分开表达并使用连接词如“because”、“and”、“also”使逻辑更清晰。内容具体但可更丰富。

例: Of course, I believe singing brings happiness because it helps people relax and relieve stress. Also, singing favorite songs makes people feel joyful. Additionally, singing connects people and allows them to express emotions.

× Singing is a very special activity that I really love it because when I'm singing I can relax myself and have a happy experience and of course the terrible things will be thrown out.

✓ Singing is a very special activity that I really love because when I'm singing I can relax myself and have a happy experience, and of course the terrible things will be thrown out.

句子中出现了多余的代词“it”，导致句子结构重复且不通顺。应去掉“it”，使句子结构更简洁明确。

× she is really a hardworking and tender person who take care of me and do a lot of things for me,

✓ she is really a hardworking and tender person who takes care of me and does a lot of things for me,

关系代词who指代单数person，谓语动词应使用第三人称单数形式，故应将take改为takes，do改为does。

× singing can connect each other and express emotion.

✓ singing can connect people with each other and express emotion.

“each other”是相互代词，不能单独作为宾语使用，需加上连接的对象，如“people with each other”，使表达完整正确。