Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is good but needs improvement in grammar and clarity. For example, use 'ways' instead of 'way' and correct prepositions like 'connect our emotions with others'. Also, avoid redundancy by combining similar ideas. Try to use linking words like 'because' and 'for example' properly to make your answer more coherent.

例: Yes, I like singing because it is one of the best ways to connect our emotions with others. For example, when I feel lonely or sad, singing helps me feel better and enjoy the moment. Therefore, singing is a great way to refresh our mind.

提案: Your answer needs better grammar and sentence structure. Use correct verb forms like 'taken' instead of 'take'. Also, avoid repeating the same idea unnecessarily. Use linking words like 'so' or 'therefore' to connect your sentences smoothly.

例: No, I haven't learned how to sing formally. I usually practice by myself when I listen to music, and after many attempts, I can sing the songs properly. So, I haven't taken any singing lessons or attended a school.

提案: Your answer is short and repetitive. Try to expand your response by explaining why you prefer singing for yourself and how it helps you. Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' to make your answer more natural and effective.

例: I would like to sing for myself when I feel very lonely because singing helps me to overcome my loneliness and feel more relaxed.

提案: Your answer has some grammar mistakes and unclear phrases. Use plural forms correctly, like 'ways' and 'individuals'. Also, clarify your examples and avoid confusing phrases like 'after this seeing'. Use linking words such as 'for example' and 'because' to improve coherence.

例: Yes, I think singing is one of the best ways to bring happiness. Singing allows individuals to express their emotions and is a great way to relieve stress. For example, many people feel uplifted and joyful after singing their favorite songs alone.

× Yes, I like singing because it is one of the best way to connect our emotion and with other.

✓ Yes, I like singing because it is one of the best ways to connect our emotions and with others.

The word 'way' should be plural 'ways' because it refers to one of multiple methods. 'Emotion' should be plural 'emotions' to match the plural context. 'Other' should be 'others' to refer to other people.

× So singing is one of the best way for refresh our mind.

✓ So singing is one of the best ways to refresh our mind.

'Way' should be plural 'ways' because it refers to one of multiple methods. 'For refresh' is incorrect; the correct form is 'to refresh'.

× I haven't take any singing lessons or attended a school.

✓ I haven't taken any singing lessons or attended a school.

After 'haven't', the past participle form 'taken' should be used instead of the base form 'take'.

× I think singing is one of the best way to bring happiness.

✓ I think singing is one of the best ways to bring happiness.

'Way' should be plural 'ways' because it refers to one of multiple methods.

× Singing allows individual express their emotion and can be great way to relieve stress.

✓ Singing allows individuals to express their emotions and can be a great way to relieve stress.

'Individual' should be plural 'individuals' to match 'their'. 'Express' needs 'to' before it. 'Emotion' should be plural 'emotions'. 'Way' should be preceded by 'a' to be grammatically correct.

× For example, many people feel uplifted and joyful after this seeing their favorite song either alone.

✓ For example, many people feel uplifted and joyful after seeing their favorite song, even when alone.

The phrase 'after this seeing' is incorrect; it should be 'after seeing'. 'Either alone' is unclear and should be replaced with 'even when alone' for clarity.