Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答表达不够清晰，语法和用词错误较多，影响了表达的自然性和有效性。建议简洁明了地表达观点，并用正确的语法和词汇描述原因。

例: No, I don't like singing because when I was a child, my friends said my singing was not good, which made me lose confidence.

提案: 回答中语法错误较多，表达不够连贯。建议使用正确的时态和句型，清楚表达学习经历和感受。

例: Yes, I have tried to learn singing through online lessons, but I found it difficult and didn't enjoy it much.

提案: 回答不够连贯，句子结构混乱，难以理解。建议直接回答问题，并用连贯的句子表达想法。

例: I would like to sing for my friends because they have never heard me sing, and I think they would enjoy it.

提案: 回答表达不够准确，逻辑不够清晰。建议用更准确的词汇和句子表达观点，并使用连接词使句子更连贯。

例: Yes, I think singing can bring happiness because happy songs make me feel joyful, while sad songs can make me feel down.

× No, I didn't like singing because when I was a child I my friend said my singing songs is so, so hard to so not not not good, good, good science.

✓ No, I didn't like singing because when I was a child my friend said my singing was so, so bad.

句子中时态混乱，描述过去的事情应使用过去时。原句中 'is' 应改为过去时 'was'，且句子结构混乱，需简化表达。

× No, I didn't like singing because when I was a child I my friend said my singing songs is so, so hard to so not not not good, good, good science.

✓ No, I didn't like singing because when I was a child my friend said my singing was so, so bad.

句中出现了多余的代词 'I'，导致句子不通顺，应删除多余代词。

× Yes, I try to learn thing in the amazing talker for the test lessons, but I think I didn't really like singing because I think it's so hard to learn from me.

✓ Yes, I tried to learn things on Amazing Talker through test lessons, but I think I didn't really like singing because I think it's so hard for me to learn.

动词时态应与上下文一致，'try' 应改为过去时 'tried'；'learn thing' 应为复数 'learn things'；'in the amazing talker' 应改为介词短语 'on Amazing Talker'；'learn from me' 语义不通，改为 'for me to learn'。

× Yes, I try to learn thing in the amazing talker for the test lessons, but I think I didn't really like singing because I think it's so hard to learn from me.

✓ Yes, I tried to learn things on Amazing Talker through test lessons, but I think I didn't really like singing because I think it's so hard for me to learn.

句中时态不一致，前半句应使用过去时 'tried'，与后半句保持一致。

× I think my friends want me to sing for them because I never sang songs in that they never listened to me singing so they. Hope me can sing.

✓ I think my friends want me to sing for them because I have never sung songs and they have never listened to me singing, so they hope I can sing.

代词使用错误，'Hope me can sing' 应改为 'hope I can sing'；'never sang songs in that' 语法错误，改为 'have never sung songs'。

× I think my friends want me to sing for them because I never sang songs in that they never listened to me singing so they. Hope me can sing.

✓ I think my friends want me to sing for them because I have never sung songs and they have never listened to me singing, so they hope I can sing.

描述过去经历时应使用现在完成时 'have never sung'，表示到目前为止的经历。

× Yes, everything can bring happiness with people because I always sense happiness songs and can make me happy and listen to sad songs will make me be sad.

✓ Yes, everything can bring happiness to people because I always feel happy when listening to happy songs, and listening to sad songs makes me sad.

介词使用错误，'bring happiness with people' 应为 'bring happiness to people'；'sense happiness songs' 语义不清，改为 'feel happy when listening to happy songs'。

× Yes, everything can bring happiness with people because I always sense happiness songs and can make me happy and listen to sad songs will make me be sad.

✓ Yes, everything can bring happiness to people because I always feel happy when listening to happy songs, and listening to sad songs makes me sad.

代词使用不当，'can make me happy and listen to sad songs will make me be sad' 结构混乱，应分开表达，且 'make me be sad' 应简化为 'makes me sad'。