Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Старайтесь избегать повторяющихся слов и звуков, таких как "uh". Используйте более разнообразные выражения для описания своих чувств и причин.

例: Yes, I really enjoy singing because it helps me relax and express my emotions clearly.

提案: Попробуйте использовать связующие слова для более плавного перехода между идеями и добавьте немного больше деталей о вашем опыте самообучения.

例: I haven't had formal lessons since there were no teachers in my hometown; however, I taught myself by watching online videos and practicing regularly.

提案: Избегайте повторений и используйте связующие слова, чтобы сделать ответ более связным и содержательным.

例: I prefer to sing for myself because it allows me to express my feelings and enjoy the moment fully.

提案: Сократите количество пауз и повторений, используйте более разнообразную лексику и связывающие слова для улучшения связности и выразительности.

例: Absolutely, singing brings happiness because it lets people express their deepest emotions, which leads to feelings of joy and freedom worldwide.

× I like singing because, uh, it helps me to get relaxed, uh, and feel my expressions, emotions.

✓ I like singing because, uh, it helps me to relax, uh, and feel my expressions and emotions.

The phrase 'get relaxed' is incorrect; the correct form is 'relax' as a verb meaning to become less tense. Also, 'feel my expressions, emotions' is awkward; it should be 'feel my expressions and emotions' to properly connect the two nouns with a conjunction.

× Not really, because in my hometown there weren't teachers who could help us to learn how to sing, but I learned singing by watching videos and practicing on my own.

✓ Not really, because in my hometown there weren't any teachers who could help us learn how to sing, but I learned singing by watching videos and practicing on my own.

The sentence lacks the quantifier 'any' after 'weren't' to correctly express the absence of teachers. Also, 'help us to learn' is better as 'help us learn' because 'help' is followed by the base form of the verb without 'to' in this context.

× Definitely I want to sing for myself because, uh, singing helps me, uh, express my feelings.

✓ Definitely, I want to sing for myself because, uh, singing helps me, uh, express my feelings.

A comma is needed after 'Definitely' to separate the introductory adverb from the main clause for clarity and correct sentence structure.

× Definitely. I think that, uh, happiness comes with singing because, uh, while singing you can express your deepest feelings and express your, uh, emotions. That's why, uh, a lot of people around the world feel happy and freedom and joy.

✓ Definitely. I think that, uh, happiness comes from singing because, uh, while singing you can express your deepest feelings and your, uh, emotions. That's why, uh, a lot of people around the world feel happy, free, and joyful.

The phrase 'comes with singing' is better expressed as 'comes from singing' to indicate the source of happiness. Also, 'feel happy and freedom and joy' is incorrect; 'freedom' is a noun and should be replaced with the adjective 'free' to match 'happy' and 'joyful' which are adjectives describing feelings.