Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn cần rõ ràng và tự nhiên hơn. Bạn nên tránh lỗi ngữ pháp như 'make' thay vì 'makes' và sử dụng câu ngắn gọn, mạch lạc. Hãy thêm liên từ để câu trả lời trôi chảy hơn và tránh lặp từ.

例: Yes, I really enjoy singing because it inspires me. I often sing during daily activities like taking a bath, exercising, or cooking, which makes these moments more enjoyable.

提案: Bạn nên trả lời rõ ràng và tránh sử dụng từ ngữ không cần thiết như 'uh' hay 'umm'. Câu trả lời nên có cấu trúc rõ ràng với câu chủ đề và chi tiết hỗ trợ. Ngoài ra, hãy chú ý ngữ pháp và thì động từ.

例: I learned to sing only once when I was about 10 years old. However, I felt my voice was not good enough, so I didn't continue learning.

提案: Câu trả lời cần chính xác về ngữ pháp và từ vựng. Bạn nên dùng cụm từ đúng như 'to lift their spirits' thay vì 'fool off energy'. Hãy sử dụng liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

例: I want to sing for my family because I hope to inspire them with my lively personality and lift their spirits every day.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu rõ ràng và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp, sử dụng từ vựng phù hợp và câu hoàn chỉnh. Hãy tránh lỗi chính tả như 'Saying' thay vì 'Singing' và dùng các ví dụ cụ thể để làm rõ ý.

例: Yes, I believe singing brings happiness because it creates a powerful and comforting energy that stays with people. For example, singing can help reduce stress and improve mood.

× I can sing every activities in my day such as taking a bath, doing the exercise, cooking.

✓ I can sing during every activity in my day such as taking a bath, doing exercise, cooking.

The word 'activities' is plural but 'every' requires a singular noun. Also, 'doing the exercise' should be 'doing exercise' without 'the' because it refers to exercise in general.

× I love singing because it make me feel so inspired.

✓ I love singing because it makes me feel so inspired.

The verb 'make' should be 'makes' to agree with the third person singular subject 'it'.

× Just in, uh, just one time I'm gonna go was uh, 10 years old, but I feel my voice is not good enough to sing umm, so I just studied one time only.

✓ Just once, when I was 10 years old, but I felt my voice was not good enough to sing, so I only studied one time.

The sentence mixes tenses and uses informal phrases. 'I'm gonna go was' is incorrect; it should be 'when I was'. Also, 'feel' and 'is' should be in past tense 'felt' and 'was' to match the past context.

× I want to inspire them my fascinating and lively personality.

✓ I want to inspire them with my fascinating and lively personality.

The verb 'inspire' requires the preposition 'with' to indicate the means or cause of inspiration.

× I want them to fool off energy every day.

✓ I want them to feel full of energy every day.

The phrase 'fool off' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'feel full of' to express having a lot of energy.

× Saying do bring happiness to people is a powerful and comforting energy that stay with everyone.

✓ Singing does bring happiness to people; it is a powerful and comforting energy that stays with everyone.

'Saying' should be 'Singing'. The verb 'do bring' should be 'does bring' to agree with singular subject 'singing'. 'Stay' should be 'stays' to agree with singular 'energy'.

× Seeing can bring many benefits such as feeling in spite of.

✓ Singing can bring many benefits such as positive feelings despite difficulties.

'Seeing' is incorrect; it should be 'Singing'. The phrase 'feeling in spite of' is incomplete and unclear; it should be clarified to 'positive feelings despite difficulties' or similar.