Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn có ý tưởng tốt nhưng cần cải thiện về ngữ pháp và cách diễn đạt để tự nhiên hơn. Bạn nên tránh lặp từ "like" không cần thiết và sửa lỗi ngữ pháp như "unwell unwell". Hãy sử dụng câu đơn giản, rõ ràng và mạch lạc hơn.

例: Yes, I enjoy singing because it helps me express my emotions and relieve stress. After a long day, singing calms me and makes me feel relaxed.

提案: Bạn cần chú ý ngữ pháp và cách dùng từ, ví dụ như "not rely" nên là "not relying" và "tutorial from the online" nên là "online tutorials". Ngoài ra, câu cuối nên rõ ràng hơn và tránh dùng từ không chính xác như "assess".

例: Yes, I have learned to sing, but mostly not through professional courses or teachers. I usually learn by watching online tutorials. I believe my singing skills have improved a lot.

提案: Bạn nên tránh dùng từ thừa như "like" nhiều lần và sửa lỗi ngữ pháp như "to singing" thành "to sing". Câu trả lời nên mạch lạc và có cấu trúc rõ ràng hơn.

例: I would like to sing for everyone, including my family, grandparents, and friends. Also, if I have the chance, I would enjoy singing at a coffee shop to express myself.

提案: Câu trả lời có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng không chính xác như "sayings" thay vì "singing", "can sings" thay vì "can sing". Bạn nên nói rõ ràng, tránh lặp từ và hoàn chỉnh câu để ý nghĩa rõ ràng hơn.

例: Yes, I believe singing and music can bring happiness to people. For example, when someone feels sad or anxious, singing or listening to songs can help calm their mind.

× I love singing because it can express my emotions and like can release my stress.

✓ I love singing because it can express my emotions and can release my stress.

The word 'like' is incorrectly used before 'can release my stress'. It should be removed to correct the sentence structure and meaning.

× Through singing I can like calm and relax and also unwell unwell after a long day.

✓ Through singing I can calm and relax and also feel better after a long day.

The word 'like' is incorrectly used before 'calm and relax'. Also, 'unwell unwell' is incorrect; it should be replaced with 'feel better' to convey the intended meaning.

× Yes, I have, but it's mostly not rely on the professional courses or teacher.

✓ Yes, I have, but I mostly do not rely on professional courses or teachers.

The modal verb 'do' is missing before 'not rely'. Also, 'teacher' should be plural to match 'courses'.

× I usually like learn how to sing through Internet and tutorial from the online.

✓ I usually learn how to sing through the Internet and tutorials online.

The preposition 'through' is correct, but 'Internet' needs the definite article 'the'. 'Tutorial' should be plural 'tutorials', and 'from the online' is incorrect; 'online' is used as an adverb here.

× But I can certainly assess that my singing skill it is very good.

✓ But I can certainly say that my singing skill is very good.

The sentence structure is incorrect with redundant 'it is'. 'Assess' is not the correct verb here; 'say' fits better.

× Or maybe in some occasions when I have a chance to singing in a coffee, I would like to express myself.

✓ Or maybe on some occasions when I have a chance to sing in a coffee shop, I would like to express myself.

The verb after 'to' should be in base form 'sing', not 'singing'. Also, 'in a coffee' is incomplete; it should be 'in a coffee shop'.

× Or maybe in some occasions when I have a chance to singing in a coffee, I would like to express myself.

✓ Or maybe on some occasions when I have a chance to sing in a coffee shop, I would like to express myself.

The preposition 'in' should be 'on' when referring to 'occasions'. Also, 'in a coffee' is incorrect; it should be 'in a coffee shop'.

× Yes I do I think that sayings and music either can bring happiness to anyone for example when you are sad or like anxiety I think that you can sings or like listen to a songs that will calm your mind and also.

✓ Yes, I do. I think that singing and music can bring happiness to anyone. For example, when you are sad or anxious, I think that you can sing or listen to songs that will calm your mind.

'Sayings' is incorrect; it should be 'singing'. 'Either' is unnecessary here. 'Sings' should be 'sing' to match the modal 'can'. 'Like' is incorrectly used and should be removed. 'A songs' is incorrect; 'songs' is plural and does not need 'a'.