Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中存在多处语法和表达错误，且内容重复，缺乏清晰的主题句和逻辑连接。建议简化句子结构，明确表达喜欢唱歌的原因，并使用连接词使回答更连贯。

例: Yes, I like singing because it makes me feel happy and relaxed. When I was a child, I often listened to songs with my family, which inspired my love for singing.

提案: 回答语法错误较多，表达不清晰，且内容不完整。建议直接回答是否学过唱歌，并简要说明原因，避免重复和无关信息。

例: I have never formally learned how to sing, but I have played the piano for four years. My piano teacher suggested I should learn singing because I have a good voice, but I haven't taken lessons yet.

提案: 回答表达不够清晰，句子结构混乱，缺少明确的主题句。建议明确说明想为谁唱歌，并用连词组织句子，使表达更自然流畅。

例: I enjoy singing in many situations, such as when I ride my bike or listen to music I like. Sometimes, if friends are singing songs I know, I join them and sing together.

提案: 回答内容较好，有个人经历支持观点，但结尾不完整，且部分表达不够准确。建议补充完整句子，注意语法和用词准确性。

例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness. When I was 18, a difficult time in my life, I listened to a song called 'Shan Yao' which comforted me and gave me energy. Singing or listening to music can really lift people's spirits.

× Definitely yes I like saying but I don't know why I like saying too much I asked this question to my mother when I was a little girl and she answered me that maybe maybe I listened too much before I broke and another reason is I raise up with my.

✓ Definitely yes, I like singing but I don't know why I like singing too much. I asked this question to my mother when I was a little girl and she answered me that maybe I listened too much before I broke and another reason is I was raised with my.

动词 'like' 后面应该接动名词形式，表示喜欢做某事，所以 'saying' 应改为 'singing'。此外，'raise up' 用法不当，应该用被动语态 'was raised' 表示被抚养长大。

× Definitely yes I like saying but I don't know why I like saying too much I asked this question to my mother when I was a little girl and she answered me that maybe maybe I listened too much before I broke and another reason is I raise up with my.

✓ Definitely yes, I like singing but I don't know why I like singing too much. I asked this question to my mother when I was a little girl and she answered me that maybe I listened too much before I broke and another reason is I was raised with my.

描述过去发生的动作时，动词应使用过去时态，如 'asked' 和 'answered'。此外，'broke' 这里用法不清，可能需要更准确表达。

× I never know how to sing, but I learn how to play the piano for about four years and my pianist piano teacher told me I should to learn how to sing because my voice is great and my mother think it's meaningless.

✓ I never knew how to sing, but I learned how to play the piano for about four years and my piano teacher told me I should learn how to sing because my voice is great and my mother thinks it's meaningless.

'know' 和 'learn' 需要用过去时态 'knew' 和 'learned' 来描述过去的经历。'should to learn' 中 'to' 不应出现，应为 'should learn'。'pianist piano teacher' 表达重复，应简化为 'piano teacher'。此外，主谓一致错误，'mother think' 应为 'mother thinks'。

× my mother think it's meaningless.

✓ my mother thinks it's meaningless.

主语是第三人称单数 'my mother'，谓语动词应加 -s，故 'think' 应改为 'thinks'。

× just sing to my.

✓ just sing to myself.

'my' 是形容词性物主代词，后面应接名词或反身代词，表达自己时应使用反身代词 'myself'。

× I like seeing any possible situation.

✓ I like singing in any possible situation.

'like seeing' 应为 'like singing'，且 'in any possible situation' 更符合表达习惯，表示在任何可能的情况下唱歌。

× For example, I think when I ride a bike or listening a melody that suits my taste, or there are some people sing songs.

✓ For example, I think when I ride a bike or listen to a melody that suits my taste, or when there are some people singing songs.

'listening' 应改为动词原形 'listen'，且 'listen' 后应加介词 'to'。'there are some people sing songs' 结构不正确，应改为 'there are some people singing songs'。

× Oh, these songs I know and I can sing. I will sing with him or sing with her.

✓ Oh, these are songs I know and I can sing. I will sing with him or with her.

句子中缺少系动词 'are'，'sing with him or sing with her' 中重复 'sing' 可简化为 'sing with him or with her'。

× For me, definitely yes. When I was 18 years old, which was the lowest part of my life, I didn't know what to do.

✓ For me, definitely yes. When I was 18 years old, it was the lowest part of my life, and I didn't know what to do.

'which' 指代不明，句子结构不完整，应改为 'it was the lowest part of my life'，并用连词 'and' 连接句子。

× However, I always listened to a song called Shan Yao whenever I felt outside.

✓ However, I always listened to a song called Shan Yao whenever I felt down.

'felt outside' 用法错误，表达情绪低落应使用 'felt down'。

× Singing or listening to the music can really let the.

✓ Singing or listening to music can really make me feel better.

句子不完整，缺少宾语和谓语，需补充完整表达。