Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 답변이 자연스럽지 않고 문법 오류가 많습니다. 'when I singing' 대신 'when I sing'를 사용하고, 'my feet is better'는 의미가 불분명하므로 명확하게 표현해야 합니다. 또한, 'singing is my hearing way'는 의미 전달이 어렵습니다. 문장을 간결하고 명확하게 구성하는 연습이 필요합니다.

例: Yes, I like singing because it helps me relieve stress and makes me feel happier.

提案: 문법 오류가 있습니다. 'how to singing' 대신 'how to sing'를 사용해야 하며, 'when I was high school student'는 'when I was a high school student'로 수정해야 합니다. 문장을 더 자연스럽게 연결하는 연습이 필요합니다.

例: Yes, I learned how to sing from my music teacher when I was a high school student.

提案: 문법과 어휘 사용에 오류가 많고, 문장이 명확하지 않습니다. 'adorable people' 대신 'adorable person'을 사용하고, 'I want to sing in her'는 의미가 불분명합니다. 감정을 표현할 때 더 자연스럽고 정확한 표현을 사용해야 합니다.

例: I want to sing for my mother because she is very lovely, and I love her very much.

提案: 마지막 문장이 이해하기 어렵고, 문법과 어휘 사용이 부적절합니다. '10 people and pepper'는 의미가 불분명하므로 제거하고, 노래가 사람들에게 행복을 준다는 점을 명확하고 구체적으로 설명하는 연습이 필요합니다.

例: Yes, I think singing can bring happiness because listening to songs can improve people's mood and make them feel joyful.

× Yes, I like singing because when I singing my stress is out and my feet is better so singing is my hearing way.

✓ Yes, I like singing because when I sing, my stress goes away and my feet feel better, so singing is my healing way.

'When I singing' is incorrect because after 'when' we need the base form of the verb for present tense, so 'sing' is correct. Also, 'my stress is out' is unnatural; 'my stress goes away' is better. 'My feet is better' has subject-verb agreement error; 'feet' is plural, so 'feel better' is correct. 'My hearing way' is incorrect; likely meant 'healing way' meaning singing helps heal or relax.

× Yes, when I was high school student in music lessons I learned how to singing from the music teacher.

✓ Yes, when I was a high school student, in music lessons I learned how to sing from the music teacher.

'How to singing' is incorrect; after 'how to' we use the base form of the verb, so 'sing' is correct. Also, 'was high school student' needs an article 'a' before 'high school student'.

× I want to sing for my mother because my mother is very adorable people so I so much love her so I want to sing in her.

✓ I want to sing for my mother because she is a very adorable person. I love her very much, so I want to sing for her.

'My mother is very adorable people' is incorrect because 'people' is plural but refers to one person; 'person' is correct. 'I so much love her' is unnatural; 'I love her very much' is better. 'I want to sing in her' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'for her' when expressing singing dedicated to someone.

× Yes, because when people hear the song they feel much better. 10 people and pepper. There's pleasure.

✓ Yes, because when people hear songs, they feel much better. It brings them pleasure.

The sentence '10 people and pepper' is unclear and seems like a mistake. It should be removed or corrected. 'There's pleasure' is vague; 'It brings them pleasure' clarifies the meaning. Also, 'the song' can be plural 'songs' to generalize.