Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 답변이 자연스럽고 직접적이지만, 'relieve my stress' 대신 'help me relieve stress'와 같은 표현을 사용하면 더 자연스럽습니다. 또한, 구체적인 예시를 추가하여 답변을 풍부하게 만드는 것이 좋습니다.

例: I like singing because it helps me relieve stress after a long day at work. For example, when I sing my favorite songs, I feel more relaxed and happy.

提案: 답변이 명확하지만, 'sometimes feel really embarrassed' 대신 'often feel embarrassed'와 같은 더 자연스러운 표현을 사용하고, 이유를 좀 더 구체적으로 설명하면 좋습니다.

例: I have never learned how to sing because I often feel embarrassed singing in front of others, especially when I am not confident about my voice.

提案: 답변이 다소 중복되고 어색한 부분이 있습니다. 'Umm'과 같은 불필요한 말은 피하고, 문장을 간결하게 하며, 구체적인 이유나 감정을 덧붙이면 좋습니다.

例: I want to sing for my parents because they have always supported me. Although I am shy and rarely sing in front of others, singing for them would be a special way to show my gratitude.

提案: 답변이 긍정적이지만, 문법 오류('singing allow' → 'singing allows')를 수정하고, 좀 더 구체적인 이유나 예시를 추가하면 좋습니다.

例: Yes, I definitely think singing can bring happiness to people because it allows us to express our feelings positively. For instance, singing can lift our mood and help us connect with others.

× I like singing because it makes me relieve my stress after a long day.

✓ I like singing because it helps me relieve my stress after a long day.

The verb 'makes' is incorrectly followed by the base verb 'relieve'. The correct structure is 'make someone do something' or 'help someone do something'. Here, 'helps me relieve' is more appropriate to express assistance in relieving stress.

× Yes, I definitely think singing can bring happiness to people, since singing allow us to express our feelings in a good way.

✓ Yes, I definitely think singing can bring happiness to people, since singing allows us to express our feelings in a good way.

The subject 'singing' is singular, so the verb should be 'allows' (third person singular) instead of 'allow'. This is a subject-verb agreement issue related to verb form with singular subject.