Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn cần rõ ràng và mạch lạc hơn. Bạn nên tránh lặp từ và sử dụng cấu trúc câu đơn giản, tự nhiên hơn. Hãy tập trung trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi và bổ sung chi tiết cụ thể, tránh lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng không chính xác.

例: Yes, I really enjoy singing because it makes me feel happy and relaxed. When I was a child, my mother took me to a concert, and since then I have loved singing, especially songs by Danny. I often sing at home to practice and have fun.

提案: Bạn cần cải thiện ngữ pháp và cách dùng từ để câu trả lời tự nhiên hơn. Hãy sử dụng câu đơn giản, tránh lỗi sai về thì và danh từ số nhiều. Ngoài ra, hãy dùng liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

例: Yes, I started learning how to sing when I was six years old. My school offered many singing lessons, and I really enjoyed them because the teacher guided us carefully.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu rõ ràng và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp, từ vựng không chính xác. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi, sử dụng từ vựng phù hợp và tránh lặp từ. Hãy thêm chi tiết cụ thể để câu trả lời sinh động hơn.

例: Honestly, I would love to sing for Jeannie because I am a big fan of Blackpink, especially Jennie. I have always dreamed of performing with her at a concert.

提案: Bạn cần cải thiện ngữ pháp và cách diễn đạt để câu trả lời rõ ràng và logic hơn. Hãy tránh những câu không rõ nghĩa và sử dụng từ vựng phù hợp với ngữ cảnh. Nên dùng liên từ để kết nối ý tưởng mạch lạc.

例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness because it helps reduce stress and makes people feel more relaxed. Additionally, singing can improve mood and even boost confidence.

× when I was a children my mother, my mother and I went to meeting stadium to watch concert

✓ when I was a child my mother and I went to the meeting stadium to watch a concert

The word 'children' is plural, but the context requires the singular form 'child' because it refers to the speaker at a young age. Also, 'concert' needs an article 'a' and 'meeting stadium' should be preceded by 'the' to specify the place.

× went to meeting stadium to watch concert

✓ went to the meeting stadium to watch a concert

The phrase 'meeting stadium' requires the definite article 'the' to specify the place, and 'concert' needs the indefinite article 'a' because it is a singular countable noun.

× Then after that I very love singer, especially Danny

✓ Then after that I really love singers, especially Danny

The adverb 'very' is incorrectly used before 'love'; 'really' is more appropriate. Also, 'singer' should be plural 'singers' to generalize the category, or if referring to one, it should be 'a singer'.

× Then I always sing at home

✓ Then I always sing at home

This sentence is correct; no correction needed.

× I have even learned how to sing when I was six years old

✓ I learned how to sing when I was six years old

The present perfect tense 'have learned' is not appropriate with a specific past time 'when I was six years old'; simple past 'learned' should be used.

× In my school they have numerous lesson about teach student to single

✓ In my school they have numerous lessons about teaching students to sing

'Lesson' should be plural 'lessons' to match 'numerous'. 'Teach student' should be 'teaching students' to use the gerund and plural noun. 'Single' is incorrect; the verb 'sing' is correct.

× Then in the lessons I really love to sing and teacher guide our students very

✓ Then in the lessons I really love to sing and the teacher guides our students well

'Teacher' needs the definite article 'the'. 'Guide' should be 'guides' to agree with singular subject 'teacher'. 'Very' is incorrectly used; 'well' is the correct adverb here.

× the person that I want to thank for named Jeannie

✓ the person that I want to thank is named Jeannie

The phrase 'thank for named' is incorrect; it should be 'thank is named' to correctly link the subject and complement.

× I am a big fan of black paint, especially single Jenny

✓ I am a big fan of Blackpink, especially singer Jennie

'Black paint' is a mishearing or misspelling of 'Blackpink' (a music group). 'Single' should be 'singer'. 'Jennie' is the correct spelling of the name.

× I always want to sing with her in the in the concert

✓ I always want to sing with her in the concert

The phrase 'in the in the' is redundant; one 'in the' is sufficient.

× Then nowadays I always choose a story

✓ Nowadays I always choose a song

'Choose a story' is incorrect in this context; likely the intended word is 'song'.

× when the people singing is to hate them more, relax and improve the knowledge

✓ when people sing, it helps them reduce stress, relax, and improve their knowledge

The original sentence is ungrammatical and unclear. Corrected to a clear structure with proper verb forms and conjunctions.