Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answers clearer and more natural by using correct grammar and vocabulary. For example, instead of 'Every next thing you know, it can let me relaxing,' say 'Singing helps me relax, especially after studying hard.' Also, avoid unclear phrases like 'I can show you I love you.'

例: Yes, I really enjoy singing because it helps me relax, especially after a long day of studying. For example, singing my favorite songs makes me feel happy and calm.

提案: Focus on giving a clear and direct answer with proper sentence structure. Instead of vague phrases like 'many special skills,' specify what you mean. Also, avoid awkward expressions like 'for a beautiful teacher.'

例: Yes, I have learned how to sing. In my high school in China, I took singing lessons from a very kind and talented teacher.

提案: Try to use more natural expressions and correct grammar. Instead of 'encourage me to be a brave girl,' say 'encourage myself to be brave.' Also, avoid repeating words unnecessarily and use linking words to connect ideas.

例: That's an interesting question. If I had to choose, I would sing for myself because music helps me encourage myself to be brave and confident.

提案: Improve your answer by using correct vocabulary and sentence structure. Instead of 'hapless,' use 'happy.' Also, try to use linking words like 'if... then...' to make your answer clearer.

例: I think singing can bring happiness depending on the type of music you listen to. If you listen to happy songs, you will feel happy, but if the music is sad, it might make you feel unhappy.

× Every next thing you know, it can let me relaxing, especially in my broad study.

✓ Every next thing you know, it can let me relax, especially in my broad study.

The verb 'let' should be followed by the base form of the verb, not the '-ing' form. Therefore, 'relaxing' should be corrected to 'relax'.

× especially in my broad study.

✓ especially in my broad study room.

The word 'study' as a noun usually requires a qualifier like 'room' to specify the place. Adding 'room' clarifies the meaning and corrects the prepositional phrase.

× For example, I can show you I love you.

✓ For example, I can show you that I love you.

The sentence is missing the conjunction 'that' to connect the clauses properly, which improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Yeah, I did that.

✓ Yeah, I have done that.

The present perfect tense 'have done' is more appropriate here to indicate experience up to now, rather than simple past 'did'.

× So I learned that in my high school for a beautiful teacher.

✓ So I learned that in my high school from a beautiful teacher.

The preposition 'for' is incorrect here; 'from' is used to indicate the source of learning or teaching.

× If there's somebody I want to sing for, absolutely, that's me. That's myself.

✓ If there's somebody I want to sing for, absolutely, it's myself.

The pronoun 'myself' is used correctly for emphasis, but 'that's me' is more natural than 'that's myself'. Using 'it's myself' is acceptable for emphasis here.

× Because I always want to encourage me to be a brave girl.

✓ Because I always want to encourage myself to be a brave girl.

The reflexive pronoun 'myself' should be used when the subject and object refer to the same person.

× So I think the music is the best way to chat with me.

✓ So I think music is the best way to connect with myself.

The phrase 'chat with me' is unnatural here; 'connect with myself' better expresses the intended meaning of self-communication or reflection.

× Wow, I think is hapless or not is depend on what kind of music you listen.

✓ Wow, I think whether it is happiness or not depends on what kind of music you listen to.

The sentence lacks a subject and has incorrect verb forms. Adding 'whether it is happiness or not' and correcting verb agreement improves clarity and grammar.

× If you hear the happy one, absolutely you will feel happy, but if not, absolutely maybe we will feel unhappy.

✓ If you hear happy music, you will absolutely feel happy, but if not, you may feel unhappy.

The phrase 'the happy one' is vague; 'happy music' is clearer. Also, 'maybe we will' is awkward; 'you may' is more appropriate and consistent.