Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer shows enthusiasm but lacks clarity and natural phrasing. Avoid redundancy and unclear expressions like "by virtue of" and "unfamiliar with them" which confuse the meaning. Try to directly connect your piano experience to your love for singing with clear, simple sentences.

例: Yes, I really enjoy singing because I have been playing the piano since I was six. This experience has helped me develop a good sense of rhythm and pitch, which makes singing more enjoyable for me.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Avoid phrases like "No standing that I'm good at thing" and "haven't learned a bit of thing." Also, use linking words to connect ideas logically. Be concise and directly answer the question.

例: No, I have never formally learned how to sing. However, I have studied piano for about four to five years, which I believe has helped improve my musical skills and supports my singing.

提案: Your answer is relevant but contains repetition and some awkward phrasing. Avoid repeating phrases like "choose to choose to" and use linking words to improve flow. Also, correct grammar such as "people who knows me" to "people who know me."

例: I prefer to sing for my friends or people close to me because I feel nervous singing in front of strangers or large audiences. Singing for familiar people helps me feel more comfortable and supported.

提案: Your answer conveys a good idea but is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical mistakes. Use clearer sentence structures and linking words. Replace vague phrases like "all kinds of art people usually do" with more precise expressions.

例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness. Like other forms of art such as drawing and dancing, singing allows people to express their feelings and emotions, which can be very uplifting.

× I I do like singing a lot. It is one of my biggest hobbies by virtue of I have been practicing piano since I was six years old.

✓ I do like singing a lot. It is one of my biggest hobbies because I have been practicing piano since I was six years old.

The phrase 'by virtue of' is incorrectly used here as a conjunction. The correct conjunction to express cause or reason is 'because'. 'By virtue of' is typically used in formal contexts to mean 'because of' but not as a conjunction connecting clauses directly.

× So all of my sense of sound, of music, sense of the notes and rhythm are quite talented and unfamiliar with them, so I'm good.

✓ So all of my senses of sound, music, notes, and rhythm are quite developed and familiar to me, so I'm good.

The original sentence misuses 'sense' in singular form when referring to multiple senses, and 'talented' is incorrectly applied to senses. Also, 'unfamiliar with them' contradicts the intended meaning. Correcting to plural 'senses' and using 'developed' and 'familiar' better conveys the intended meaning.

× Have you ever learnt how to sing?

✓ Have you ever learned how to sing?

In American English, the past participle of 'learn' is commonly 'learned' rather than 'learnt'. Since the transcript uses American English conventions, 'learned' is preferred.

× No standing that I'm good at thing.

✓ No, I am not good at it.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and unclear. 'No standing that' is incorrect and 'thing' is vague. The corrected sentence clearly negates the ability and uses proper pronouns.

× I actually haven't learned a bit of thing at all.

✓ I actually haven't learned anything at all.

The phrase 'a bit of thing' is incorrect and unidiomatic. The correct quantifier to express 'not at all' is 'anything'.

× All I have learned is about four to five years of piano.

✓ All I have learned is about four to five years of piano playing.

The phrase 'four to five years of piano' is incomplete; 'piano playing' or 'playing the piano' is needed to complete the meaning.

× To put in another way, I do think that learning piano is a quite good booster in my adventure in scene.

✓ In other words, I do think that learning piano is quite a good booster in my singing journey.

'To put in another way' is awkward; 'In other words' is more natural. Also, 'adventure in scene' is unclear; 'singing journey' better fits the context.

× I prefer to sing to my friends or somebody who is close to me 'cause I'm nervous while standing in front of the strangers and I'm nervous in front of many people.

✓ I prefer to sing to my friends or someone who is close to me because I'm nervous standing in front of strangers and many people.

'Somebody' is less formal than 'someone' and 'the strangers' is incorrect; 'strangers' without 'the' is correct. Also, 'because' is preferred over the informal ''cause'.

× So I tend to choose to choose to sing to people who knows me.

✓ So I tend to choose to sing to people who know me.

The verb 'knows' does not agree with the plural subject 'people'. The correct form is 'people who know me'. Also, 'choose to choose' is redundant; one 'choose' is sufficient.

× Wow. And who will encourage me.

✓ Wow, and who will encourage me.

Starting a sentence with 'And' is generally informal and the period after 'Wow' should be a comma to connect the sentence properly.

× Yes, I do think so. I think all kinds of art people usually do are good ways to express our feelings, containing drawing, dancing and singing and other music kinds 'cause I think our efforts and our power we use into each notes is a way that we express ourselves.

✓ Yes, I do think so. I think all kinds of art that people usually do are good ways to express our feelings, including drawing, dancing, singing, and other kinds of music because I think the effort and energy we put into each note is a way to express ourselves.

The original sentence has several issues: 'containing' should be 'including'; 'and other music kinds' should be 'other kinds of music'; ''cause' should be 'because'; 'our power we use into each notes' is awkward and ungrammatical, corrected to 'the effort and energy we put into each note'; also, 'notes' should be singular 'note' to match 'each'.