Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more structured and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add specific reasons or examples. Also, use correct grammar and avoid repeating words unnecessarily.

例: Yes, I have loved singing since my childhood because it helps me relax. I enjoy listening to various kinds of songs, and I often sing alone when I want to feel happy.

提案: Make your answer more concise and clear. Use linking words to connect ideas and correct grammar. Avoid repeating phrases like 'learn how to sing a song' multiple times.

例: Yes, I learned to sing at school because music was one of my subjects. In music classes, I also learned to play different musical instruments.

提案: Focus on answering the question directly and avoid unrelated content. Use linking words to explain your reasons clearly. Also, avoid repeating words and check grammar.

例: I like to sing for my parents because they always appreciate my singing. Their support helps me feel better when I am stressed or sad.

提案: Try to speak more clearly and avoid filler words like 'uh'. Structure your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details using linking words. Also, use correct grammar and complete sentences.

例: Yes, singing can bring happiness to people of all ages. For example, youngsters and older people enjoy listening to different kinds of songs because it helps them relax and feel joyful.

× I love singing since my childhood I love to to listen different kind of songs and now I also listen different kind of songs and also sing song when I when I am alone.

✓ I have loved singing since my childhood. I love to listen to different kinds of songs and now I also listen to different kinds of songs and also sing songs when I am alone.

The phrase 'I love singing since my childhood' is incorrect because 'since' requires the present perfect tense to indicate an action started in the past and continues now. So, 'I have loved singing since my childhood' is correct. Also, 'listen different kind of songs' is missing the preposition 'to' and the plural form 'kinds' is needed for 'different kinds of songs'. Similarly, 'sing song' should be plural 'sing songs'. These corrections improve grammatical accuracy and clarity.

× I love to to listen different kind of songs and now I also listen different kind of songs and also sing song when I when I am alone.

✓ I love to listen to different kinds of songs and now I also listen to different kinds of songs and also sing songs when I am alone.

The verb 'listen' requires the preposition 'to' when followed by an object. Therefore, 'listen different kind of songs' should be 'listen to different kinds of songs'. This correction ensures proper verb-preposition usage.

× I love to to listen different kind of songs and now I also listen different kind of songs and also sing song when I when I am alone.

✓ I love to listen to different kinds of songs and now I also listen to different kinds of songs and also sing songs when I am alone.

The phrase 'different kind of songs' should be pluralized to 'different kinds of songs' because 'different' implies multiple categories. Also, 'sing song' should be 'sing songs' to match plural form. This correction aligns noun forms with their quantifiers.

× Yes, I learned how to sing a song in my school.

✓ Yes, I learned how to sing a song at my school.

The preposition 'in' is incorrect when referring to attending a school; 'at' is the correct preposition. Also, 'learned' is correctly used in past tense here. The correction improves prepositional accuracy.

× I have a subject of music in my school, so in the music classes I learn how to sing a song and I also play different kind of instrument of music.

✓ I had a music subject at my school, so in music classes I learned how to sing a song and I also played different kinds of musical instruments.

The phrase 'a subject of music' is better expressed as 'a music subject'. 'In my school' should be 'at my school'. 'Learn' and 'play' should be in past tense 'learned' and 'played' to match the past context. 'Different kind of instrument of music' should be pluralized and rephrased as 'different kinds of musical instruments'. These corrections improve tense consistency, preposition use, and pluralization.

× so in the music classes I learn how to sing a song and I also play different kind of instrument of music.

✓ so in music classes I learned how to sing a song and I also played different kinds of musical instruments.

Since the action happened in the past, 'learn' and 'play' should be in past tense 'learned' and 'played'. Also, 'different kind of instrument of music' should be pluralized and rephrased as 'different kinds of musical instruments' for correctness.

× Who do you want to sing for?

✓ Who do you want to sing for?

This sentence is grammatically correct. No correction needed.

× I love to sing a song for my parents because because they always appreciate me to sing a song and whenever I feel depressed or stressed they always in the mood. How to boost my confidence?

✓ I love to sing songs for my parents because they always appreciate me singing, and whenever I feel depressed or stressed, they always help boost my confidence.

The phrase 'appreciate me to sing a song' is incorrect; 'appreciate me singing' or 'appreciate it when I sing' is correct. The phrase 'they always in the mood. How to boost my confidence?' is incomplete and unclear; it is corrected to 'they always help boost my confidence' to convey the intended meaning. Also, 'a song' is better as 'songs' for generality. These corrections improve pronoun use, sentence completeness, and clarity.

× I love to sing a song for my parents because because they always appreciate me to sing a song and whenever I feel depressed or stressed they always in the mood. How to boost my confidence?

✓ I love to sing songs for my parents because they always appreciate me singing, and whenever I feel depressed or stressed, they always help boost my confidence.

Using 'a song' repeatedly is less natural than 'songs' when speaking generally. Also, the phrase 'they always in the mood' is incomplete and unclear; it is corrected to 'they always help boost my confidence' to express the intended meaning. These changes improve quantifier use and sentence clarity.

× I love to sing a song for my parents because because they always appreciate me to sing a song and whenever I feel depressed or stressed they always in the mood. How to boost my confidence?

✓ I love to sing songs for my parents because they always appreciate me singing, and whenever I feel depressed or stressed, they always help boost my confidence.

The original sentence has repetition ('because because') and incomplete clauses ('they always in the mood. How to boost my confidence?'). The corrected sentence removes repetition and restructures the sentence to be complete and clear, improving overall sentence structure.

× Yes, of course, nowadays youngsters, old people, every age group, people lo uh, love to listen different kind of songs because it makes very relaxing and in the youngsters, it makes them very relaxed from their.

✓ Yes, of course, nowadays youngsters, old people, and people of every age group love to listen to different kinds of songs because it is very relaxing, and for youngsters, it helps them relax from their stress.

The verb 'listen' requires the preposition 'to' when followed by an object, so 'listen different kind of songs' should be 'listen to different kinds of songs'. 'Different kind' should be pluralized to 'different kinds'. The phrase 'it makes very relaxing' is incorrect; it should be 'it is very relaxing'. 'In the youngsters' is incorrect preposition use; 'for youngsters' is correct. The phrase 'it makes them very relaxed from their' is incomplete and unclear; it is corrected to 'it helps them relax from their stress' for clarity. These corrections improve preposition use, pluralization, and sentence clarity.