Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally clear and relevant, but it contains some redundancy and minor grammatical errors (e.g., "it it"). To improve, try to be more concise and correct small mistakes. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, I enjoy singing because it resonates with my emotions and uplifts my spirit. Whenever I listen to my favorite songs, I like to sing along, especially when I can relate to the lyrics.

提案: Your answer addresses the question but could be more concise and better structured. Avoid repeating similar ideas ("tried to mimic and try to practice"). Use linking words to improve coherence and vary your vocabulary.

例: I haven't taken formal singing lessons, but I have learned by watching tutorials on YouTube and social media. I practice by mimicking the singers and singing along to improve my skills.

提案: This is a well-structured and heartfelt answer. To improve, you could use more varied vocabulary and linking words to make the response smoother and more natural.

例: I love singing for my baby, who is four months old. Whenever she feels sleepy, I sing gentle lullabies to help her fall asleep. It brings me great joy to know that my voice comforts her, so I often sing for her.

提案: Your answer has good ideas but lacks clarity and contains some grammatical errors. Try to use linking words properly and avoid repetition. Also, be more specific and precise in your explanations.

例: I believe singing brings happiness because it uplifts people's moods and creates a positive atmosphere. Additionally, singing together can strengthen bonds between people who share the same experience.

× I always listen to my favorite song and sing along with it.

✓ I always listen to my favorite songs and sing along with them.

The word 'song' should be plural 'songs' because the context implies listening to multiple songs, and the pronoun 'it' should be 'them' to agree with the plural noun.

× The reason is it it resonates with my emotion and uplifts my spirit whenever I sing and listen to the music, especially if I can relate to the lyrics.

✓ The reason is it resonates with my emotions and uplifts my spirit whenever I sing and listen to music, especially if I can relate to the lyrics.

The word 'emotion' should be plural 'emotions' because feelings are generally considered in plural form. Also, 'the music' is better as 'music' here because music is an uncountable noun and does not need the definite article in this context.

× Have you ever learnt how to sing?

✓ Have you ever learned how to sing?

In American English, the past participle of 'learn' is commonly 'learned' rather than 'learnt'. Using 'learned' is more standard in this context.

× I also tried to mimic and try to practice how to sing.

✓ I also tried to mimic and practice how to sing.

The verb 'try' is redundant here because 'tried' already applies to both 'mimic' and 'practice'. Also, 'try to practice' is awkward; simply 'practice' is sufficient after 'tried to mimic'.

× I always want to sing for my baby.

✓ I always want to sing for my baby.

This sentence is grammatically correct and fits the present tense context expressing a habitual desire, so no correction is needed.

× whenever she's sleepy I will sing her a gentle lullaby and it helps to make her sleep.

✓ Whenever she's sleepy, I sing her a gentle lullaby and it helps her to sleep.

Using 'will' here is less appropriate because the action is habitual; simple present tense 'sing' is better. Also, 'helps to make her sleep' is awkward; 'helps her to sleep' is the correct expression.

× It offers a lot of psychological benefits, it uplifts mood and creates a good atmosphere, and it also creates a bond between people who shared the same experience and who shared same.

✓ It offers a lot of psychological benefits, uplifts mood, creates a good atmosphere, and also creates a bond between people who share the same experience.

The verb 'shared' should be present tense 'share' to match the present tense context. Also, the phrase 'who shared same' is incomplete and should be 'who share the same experience.' Additionally, 'uplifts mood' is better as 'uplifts the mood' but since 'the' is missing, it's acceptable as a general statement.