Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Ваш ответ не является естественным и понятным. Он содержит неполные предложения и не отвечает прямо на вопрос. Рекомендуется давать полный ответ с чётким объяснением, избегая разрозненных фраз.

例: I don't usually like singing, but when I'm in a good mood, I enjoy singing my favorite songs to relax.

提案: Ответ не структурирован и содержит грамматические ошибки. Следует отвечать прямо, используя связные предложения и объясняя причины, почему вы изучаете пение.

例: Yes, I have looked for information on how to sing properly because I am interested in improving my skills.

提案: Ответ содержит много пауз и неполных предложений. Рекомендуется использовать связные предложения и объяснять свои чувства более ясно и полно.

例: I am quite shy, so I prefer to sing only for myself or close friends because I cannot imagine singing in front of a large crowd.

提案: Ответ содержит много пауз и повторений, что снижает его естественность. Следует использовать более плавные и связные выражения, избегая лишних звуков и повторов.

例: Yes, singing definitely brings happiness because it unites people, especially when someone plays the guitar and everyone sings a familiar song together.

× Well, to be honest, I don't really like to sing, but when I'm in the right mood. Songs like. Others.

✓ Well, to be honest, I don't really like to sing, but when I'm in the right mood, I do enjoy songs like others.

The original sentence is fragmented and lacks a clear structure. The phrase 'Songs like. Others.' is incomplete and unclear. Combining the ideas into a complete sentence improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Have you ever learnt how to sing?

✓ Have you ever learned how to sing?

'Learnt' is a British English past tense form, while 'learned' is the American English equivalent. Depending on the dialect, 'learned' is preferred in American English. Since the rest of the transcript uses American English conventions, 'learned' is more appropriate.

× But sometimes I search for the information on how to sing properly. I do it because of your interest and I think I would like.

✓ But sometimes I search for information on how to sing properly because of my interest, and I think I would like to learn.

The original sentences are fragmented and unclear. 'I do it because of your interest' is confusing; it likely means 'because of my interest.' Also, 'I think I would like' is incomplete and needs an object or verb to complete the thought.

× I'm a very shy person so I don't really like. That much of attention so I I think I would like to sing only for myself or my close friends because. Cannot imagine me singing in crowded place.

✓ I'm a very shy person, so I don't really like that much attention. I think I would like to sing only for myself or my close friends because I cannot imagine myself singing in a crowded place.

The original sentences are fragmented and contain incomplete thoughts. 'That much of attention' should be 'that much attention.' The phrase 'Cannot imagine me singing' is incorrect; it should be 'I cannot imagine myself singing.' Also, 'in crowded place' needs an article: 'in a crowded place.'

× Yes, obviously, because, uh, singing, it's like a, it's like a thing that brings people together, especially when. One person have a guitar and everyone sings things. Sing the song that everyone knows.

✓ Yes, obviously, because singing is like a thing that brings people together, especially when one person has a guitar and everyone sings songs that everyone knows.

The original sentence has subject-verb agreement errors: 'One person have' should be 'One person has.' Also, 'everyone sings things' is vague; 'everyone sings songs' is clearer. The sentence fragments are combined for clarity and grammatical correctness.