Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn có một số lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng không chính xác (ví dụ: "omit it", "poor scent" nên là "poor sense of pitch"). Bạn nên sử dụng từ vựng chính xác và câu ngắn gọn, rõ ràng hơn để câu trả lời tự nhiên và hiệu quả hơn.

例: I really enjoy singing, but I don't do it often because I have a poor sense of pitch and find it hard to follow the music. However, I like singing alone because it helps me relax.

提案: Bạn cần chú ý ngữ pháp và phát âm chính xác hơn, tránh lỗi như "I talk in both library and secondary school" (câu không rõ nghĩa). Hãy sử dụng câu đơn giản, rõ ràng và có liên kết logic giữa các ý.

例: Yes, I learned to sing during music classes in both primary and secondary school. Although I wasn't very good, these lessons helped me improve my singing skills a little. Singing is not my strong point, but I enjoyed learning the basics.

提案: Bạn nên chú ý ngữ pháp, ví dụ "I have a little shy" nên là "I am a little shy" và "feel" nên là "feels". Ngoài ra, hãy sử dụng các liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

例: As I mentioned before, I am a little shy when singing in front of strangers, so I prefer to sing for my family and close friends. Singing for them feels more personal and meaningful because they know me well.

提案: Bạn đã trả lời khá tốt nhưng cần chú ý ngữ pháp và từ vựng, ví dụ "relaxes" nên là "relaxed" và tránh lặp từ "as as". Hãy sử dụng các từ nối để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

例: Yes, I believe singing and music are among the best ways to bring happiness to people because they help reduce stress and improve mood. For example, when I sing, I feel relaxed and free, as if I can forget all my worries for a while. This makes me feel very comfortable and joyful.

× I'm a bit shy to omit it, but I really love singing.

✓ I'm a bit shy to admit it, but I really love singing.

The original sentence uses 'omit' incorrectly. The correct verb is 'admit' to express confessing or acknowledging something. 'Omit' means to leave out, which does not fit the context.

× I have a poor scent or pitch and fight hard to follow the music correctly.

✓ I have a poor sense of pitch and find it hard to follow the music correctly.

The phrase 'poor scent or pitch' is incorrect; 'scent' is a smell, not related to singing. The correct phrase is 'sense of pitch'. Also, 'fight hard' should be 'find it hard' to express difficulty.

× Despite this, I enjoy singing when I'm alone because it helped me relax.

✓ Despite this, I enjoy singing when I'm alone because it helps me relax.

The verb 'helped' is past tense, but the sentence refers to a general truth or habitual action, so present tense 'helps' is appropriate.

× I talk in both library and secondary school.

✓ I studied in both primary and secondary school.

The sentence uses 'talk' incorrectly; the intended meaning is likely 'studied'. Also, 'library' is incorrect; it should be 'primary school' or similar. The correction assumes 'primary school' was intended.

× Although I wasn't very good at it, these lesson help help.

✓ Although I wasn't very good at it, these lessons helped.

'Lesson' should be plural 'lessons' to match 'these'. Also, 'help help' is a repetition and should be corrected to 'helped' to match past tense.

× It helped me improve my singing skill a little.

✓ It helped me improve my singing skills a little.

'Skill' should be plural 'skills' because singing involves multiple abilities.

× As I told you before, I have a little shy when singing in front of a stranger, so I would like to sing for my family and close friends.

✓ As I told you before, I am a little shy when singing in front of strangers, so I would like to sing for my family and close friends.

'I have a little shy' is incorrect; the correct form is 'I am a little shy'. Also, 'a stranger' should be plural 'strangers' to generalize the statement.

× Singing for them feel more personal and meaningful because they know me well.

✓ Singing for them feels more personal and meaningful because they know me well.

The verb 'feel' should be 'feels' to agree with the singular subject 'Singing'.

× I believe singing and music are among the best way to bring happiness to people because they help reduce stress and improve mood.

✓ I believe singing and music are among the best ways to bring happiness to people because they help reduce stress and improve mood.

'Way' should be plural 'ways' because 'singing and music' are two things, so the plural form is needed.

× For example, when I sing, I feel relaxes and free as as if I can forget all my worries for a while.

✓ For example, when I sing, I feel relaxed and free as if I can forget all my worries for a while.

The word 'relaxes' is incorrect; the correct adjective is 'relaxed'. Also, 'as as if' is a repetition; one 'as' should be removed.